Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chat display the moral of a survey about people's coffee and tea bought and drinking routine in different five USA urban areas.

Overal,in melbourne and Hobart highest people prefer to went cafe for coffee and tea.

To start, with sydney 42% people chosses the fresh coffee and in melboure slightly loss from sydney.It is close to 41%.And in brishan and Adelaire around 34%people buying the fresh coffee.In Hobart 39%people bought the fresh coffee.

In Melbourne and Hobart slightly difference in this cities for bought the instant coffee.Brisban and Adelaida 49%people prefer the instant coffee. And in Sydnay 46% want to buy the immediately coffee.Sydney and Melbouren approximatly 61% people go to cafe and bought the coffee and tea.The city of Hobart around 60% people want to went cafe. Brishane's people 55% is slightly diference from adelaide.

In Adelaide close to 55% people prefer go to cafe and buying thecoffee and tea.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant features, especially that café visits are high in Melbourne and Hobart, and you report figures for all three activities across the cities. However, the overview is brief and does not clearly summarise the main pattern: café visits are generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee purchases are usually the least popular. Some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. For example, Adelaide café attendance is about 49.5%, not close to 55%, and Melbourne’s café figure is about 63.5%, rather than around 61%. The statement that Melbourne and Hobart have the highest café figures also overlooks Sydney’s similarly high result. A more precise overview and carefully checked comparisons would make the response more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an opening, an overview, and paragraphs describing the figures. It also uses simple sequencing phrases such as “To start” and “And.” However, the progression is difficult to follow because the discussion moves between cities and activities without a consistent organising principle. Several sentences run together, as in “It is close to 41%.And in brishan…,” and the final Adelaide café point is separated from the earlier café comparisons. Linking words are sometimes repetitive or do not clarify the relationship between details. Grouping the information by activity, and using clear comparison phrases to connect each city’s figures, would create a more coherent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “survey,” and “people,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For instance, “the moral of a survey” does not express the chart’s subject, and “immediately coffee” is not an appropriate term for instant coffee. Spelling errors such as “chosses,” “brishan,” and “Adelaire” also reduce clarity. Aim to use the chart’s labels consistently and practise accurate phrases such as “bought instant coffee” and “visited a café.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are mostly simple, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to read. Examples include “42% people chosses,” where the article and verb agreement are missing, and “people want to went cafe,” which combines verb forms incorrectly. Articles and prepositions are also often omitted, as in “go to cafe,” while punctuation and spacing problems make boundaries unclear: “41%.And” and “34%people.” These patterns show limited control of basic sentence forms, with longer attempts often becoming faulty. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, correct past-tense reporting, and punctuation between sentences.

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