Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. I will discuss the results in five cities.

Overall, In Melbourne there were so much cafes and in Brisbane the fresh coffee was less.

To begin with, Melbourne and Hobart the cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks was 67% in Malbourne and 65% in Hobart. The instant coffee was 58% and 48%. The fresh coffee in last 4 weeks was 38% and in Malbourne was 45%.

Brisbane and Adelaide fresh coffee and city residence use 50% in Adelaide and 56% use in Brisbane. The instant coffee in last four weeks in Brisbane was 56% and Adelaide were 49%. Fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in Adelaide were 34% and in Brisbane was 33% residence use it.

In conclusion, the coffee and tea usage was so much and many residents like to drink it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt to compare several cities and all three categories, so the response is relevant. However, key figures are repeatedly misreported: for example, café visits in Melbourne and Hobart are about 63.5% and 63%, not 67% and 65%; fresh coffee in Adelaide and Brisbane is about 34.5% in both, not 50% and 56%. The overview is also inaccurate and vague: “so much cafes” does not describe the chart, and the conclusion that many residents like coffee adds no useful comparison. The response contains 144 words, below the 150-word minimum; 11 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Report the main pattern accurately and support it with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, two paragraphs grouping cities, and a concluding sentence. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “In conclusion” signal stages, and the city groupings give the reader some organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because the comparisons within paragraphs are not consistently clear. For instance, “The instant coffee was 58% and 48%” does not identify which figure belongs to which city, and the Brisbane–Adelaide paragraph shifts between categories without a clear comparison. The overview and conclusion also repeat broad claims rather than guiding the reader through the main trends. Use clearer topic sentences and link each figure explicitly to its city and category.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic terms such as “bar chart,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “residents,” which help keep the response connected to the task. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several phrases are imprecise or unnatural, including “so much cafes,” “the cafe for coffee or tea,” and “residence use it.” “Coffee and tea usage was so much” is also too vague to describe the data. These choices sometimes make the intended comparison unclear, while “Malbourne” is a spelling error. Build a small set of accurate chart-reporting expressions, such as “the proportion of residents,” “visited a café,” and “was higher than,” and use them consistently rather than repeating general claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You produce several simple sentences and make an attempt at a more complex opening with “The bar chart compares…,” so there is some sentence variety. However, grammatical control is inconsistent. Examples include “In Melbourne there were so much cafes,” where the verb and quantifier do not fit the plural noun, and “The instant coffee… in Brisbane was 56% and Adelaide were 49%,” where the subject–verb agreement changes incorrectly. In “Brisbane and Adelaide fresh coffee… use 50%,” the sentence structure does not clearly express the relationship between the cities and figures. Capitalisation after “Overall,” and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise complete comparison sentences with clear subjects and parallel forms, such as “The figure for X was…, compared with… for Y.”

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