Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The presented bar graph illustrates a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities which is sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart in australia.

Overall, sydney had purchased higher propotion ratio in bought fresh cofee in last 4 weeks while brisbane had least propotion ratio. Moreover, in entire all five city bough instant cofee in last 4 week graph was showed fluctuated.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and gives an overview, noting that Sydney has the highest fresh-coffee figure and Brisbane the lowest; these comparisons match the data. However, the overview is incomplete and the report omits the café series, which is the highest category in most cities, as well as almost all supporting figures and comparisons. The statement that instant-coffee results “fluctuated” is vague and does not explain the pattern. At 57 words, the response is 93 words below the 150-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded from this count. To improve, write a fuller summary with the main patterns across all three categories and support them with selected accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic structure: an opening sentence identifies the chart, followed by a separate overview beginning with “Overall.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the response ends after the overview, so there is no developed body paragraph or clear progression through the cities and categories. The linking words “while” and “Moreover” are used, but the relationship between the ideas after “Moreover” is unclear, and “in entire all five city” makes the comparison difficult to follow. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and one or two body paragraphs grouping related data. Use clear comparisons and references so each sentence follows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant topic vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “survey,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several word-choice, spelling, and form errors reduce precision: “propotion ratio” is not a natural expression, “cofee” is misspelled, and “fluctuated” does not clearly describe the differences shown. Repetition of “coffee” and “city” also limits variety. Use standard chart-reporting language and accurate category labels, such as “proportion of residents,” “the percentage who purchased,” and “visited a café.” Check spelling carefully and choose verbs that describe the data precisely, for example “varied” or “was highest.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both a complex opening clause (“which is…”) and an overview sentence using “while,” showing some effort to connect ideas. However, grammatical control is limited. The opening has an incomplete construction after “which is,” and the overview contains faulty agreement and number forms in “in entire all five city bough instant coffee… graph was showed.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also not consistently controlled. These errors make parts of the message difficult to interpret, although the general topic and a couple of comparisons remain understandable. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons: for example, “Sydney had the highest proportion of fresh-coffee buyers, while Brisbane and Adelaide had the lowest.” Check subject–verb agreement, plurals, and past-tense forms.

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