Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart display the outcome of a survey about individuals coffee and tea purchasing a drinking routine in five Australian cities.

Overall, Brought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is slighty increase in cities while bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks level off or the went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks oscillate in different cities.

brought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in sydeny is approximately 45 percentage of cities residents also unchange in melbourne in brisbane is steadily change in they come to 35 percentage of cities inhabitant also constant in adelaide but rose up in hobart.

Bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks im sydeny is ex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, but the response reports only a small part of the information and does not clearly summarise the main comparisons. The overview says fresh-coffee buying “is slighty increase,” while café visits “oscillate,” but these descriptions are unclear and do not capture the key pattern: café attendance is highest in most cities, whereas instant coffee is the most popular category in Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. Some figures are approximately relevant, such as fresh coffee at about 45% in Sydney and 35% in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the account stops partway through the instant-coffee comparison and omits most café data. It is also 33 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and compare all three categories across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then details about fresh coffee. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview and detail sentences are not clearly separated into complete, developed paragraphs, and the final sentence breaks off after “is ex”. Several ideas are joined in a confusing sequence, particularly “level off or the went to a cafe… oscillate,” so the relationships between categories are unclear. Use one paragraph for the overview and separate paragraphs for comparisons, grouping cities or categories logically. Clear sentence boundaries and linking phrases such as “By contrast” would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “survey,” “percentage,” “cities,” and the chart categories, so the topic is generally recognisable. There are also attempts to describe trends with phrases such as “level off,” “steadily change,” and “rose up.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand: “purchasing a drinking routine” does not naturally describe buying and drinking habits, and “slighty increase” is not an appropriate description of the data. Spelling errors such as “sydeny,” “slighty,” and “im” are noticeable. Build a more precise set of chart terms, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “was higher than,” and “remained relatively stable,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and more extended sentences, but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors often make the comparisons hard to interpret. The opening, “The bar chart display,” has subject–verb disagreement; “individuals coffee” is missing a possessive form, and “Brought fresh coffee… is slighty increase” has an incorrect verb construction. In “in brisbane is steadily change in they come to 35 percentage,” the sentence structure and verb forms do not clearly express the intended comparison. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise forming accurate past-tense reporting sentences, for example, “The proportion who bought fresh coffee was about 45% in Sydney,” and use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs before attempting longer comparisons.

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