Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The feature illustrates the habits of Australian citizens buying and drinking coffee in the different cities.

Overall, we can find the chart that people from the Melbourne mostly went to a cafe for buing coffee or tea in last weeks. Hobart people liked to buy instant coffee, and Individuals from Sydney prefered to buy fresh coffee. These are the overall information from the chart.

Firstly , huge number of sydney people consumed fresh coffee in the last 4 weeks , the percentage is algrowing most 62%, and 45% brought instant coffee which is a lowerIn rate among other cities in the Australia. In Melbourne and Brisbane , the percentage is countinously

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and attempts an overview, but it reports several key features inaccurately or unclearly. For example, it says Melbourne residents mostly went to cafés, although Hobart and Melbourne are both around 63%, and claims Sydney’s fresh-coffee figure was “most 62%”; the chart shows about 44%, while café visits are about 61%. The overview also assigns preferences to cities without clearly comparing all three categories, and the final sentence is unfinished. The response contains 111 words, below the required 150, so the summary is substantially incomplete. To improve, select the main highs and lows, report figures accurately, and cover the remaining cities and categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a detail paragraph beginning “Firstly.” This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the progression is not sustained: the overview makes unclear comparisons, and the final paragraph stops at “the percentage is countinously,” leaving the discussion incomplete. Connections between ideas are also weak, as in “These are the overall information from the chart,” which does not lead clearly into the details. Group the data by meaningful comparisons, use clear linking phrases to show contrasts, and complete each paragraph so the reader can follow the account from overview to supporting figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “cafe,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For instance, “consumed fresh coffee” does not match the chart’s measure of buying it, and “the percentage is algrowing most” is unclear. There are also spelling errors such as “buing,” “prefered,” and “countinously,” alongside awkward phrases such as “overall information.” Use precise reporting language and check spelling; for example, describe residents as having “bought” coffee or “visited” cafés, rather than consumed coffee.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer constructions, including “Overall, we can find the chart that…” and a sentence comparing Sydney’s coffee figures. However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and grammatical patterns make parts difficult to understand. “We can find the chart that people from the Melbourne mostly went…” is not a clear or well-formed reporting sentence, while “In Melbourne and Brisbane, the percentage is countinously” is incomplete. Articles and number forms are also inconsistent, as in “the different cities” and “These are the overall information.” Practise complete comparison sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and articles, and use straightforward structures such as “The proportion of residents who visited cafés was highest in…”

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