Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the picture show how many tea and coffee buying and drinking people in five sector of australian cities.

if we comprision melbourne and hobart ciy the you see that melbourne is more higher tha hbbart its percentage is 64% and hobert percentage is 63% there is high competion in both area. but went to cafe is percentage is hiher bought a fresh coffee in 4 weeks

if we talk about the more coffee purchase went to coffee is topnoch and brough coffeee perchange is less like average percentage is 32 % in all cities.

if graph show which cities purchasing 49% went the fresh coffee is adelaida and brough instant coffee in 4 weeeks is 50%.

and instant coffee in 4 last week in hobart more than other cities anf if we look that sydney city which is more brought fresh coffee brought in 4week

and if we talk about brisbane is less fresh coffee take

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies several relevant features, including café visits being higher than fresh-coffee purchases in some cities and Hobart having the highest instant-coffee figure. However, the main trends are not clearly summarised, and some comparisons are inaccurate or difficult to interpret. For example, Melbourne’s café figure is about 63.5%, not 64% in a way that matters, and Hobart is about 63%; these are close, rather than showing Melbourne as clearly higher. The claim that fresh coffee averages 32% is also inaccurate: the city figures range from about 34.5% to 44%. To strengthen the report, give a clear overview and select accurate comparisons across all three categories, rather than making unclear claims such as “49% went the fresh coffee.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to group information by comparison, using phrases such as “if we talk about” and “if we look that sydney city.” However, the ideas do not progress in a clear order, and the response lacks a distinct overview followed by organised details. Several statements are difficult to connect, particularly “the more coffee purchase went to coffee is topnoch” and the shift from Adelaide to Hobart and Sydney in the same passage. Repeated conditional openings also make the linking mechanical rather than guiding the reader through the data. Organise the report into an introduction, a concise overview, and detail paragraphs—for example, compare café attendance first, then fresh and instant coffee purchases by city.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts vocabulary relevant to the chart, including “percentage,” “purchase,” “average,” and “competition,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and many word choices, spellings, or collocations make the meaning hard to follow: “topnoch,” “brough coffeee,” “more higher,” and “high competion” do not communicate the intended comparisons clearly. Some expressions also use the wrong category, such as “went to coffee” instead of describing a visit to a café. Use precise chart language consistently, such as “the proportion of residents,” “bought instant coffee,” and “visited a café.” Check spelling and choose verbs that match the activity being measured.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences with clauses beginning “if we…” and “if we look…,” but control is limited and errors frequently obscure relationships between ideas. For example, “the picture show how many tea and coffee buying and drinking people” has problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence structure, while “if we comprision melbourne and hobart ciy the you see” does not form a clear conditional sentence. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also often missing or inconsistent, as in “went to cafe is percentage.” Most sentences rely on simple or loosely joined clauses, with little accurate variety. Build clear subject–verb sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “whereas” or “while.”

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