Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustrates the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in different Australian cities.

Overall, The proportion of went to a cafe for coffee or tea had increased over the period. In contrast, the percentage of buying fresh coffee had declined by the time. Whearase, the percenatge of buying instant coffee approximately had a minor change.

The percenatge of people who wentto acafe for coffee and tea had largest proportion in Melbourn at 63% and smallest in Adelaida at 48%. In contrast, the percenatae of people who bought fresh coffee had the largest ratio in Sydney and smallest in Brisbane at 30%. While,the percenatge of people who but instant coffee had the largest proportion in H

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, but the response only partially reports the main features and contains important inaccuracies. This is a bar chart comparing five cities at one point, not a time series, so claims that café visits “had increased” and fresh-coffee buying “had declined” are unsupported. You correctly identify Adelaide as having the lowest café figure, but Melbourne is not the highest: Hobart is about 63%, just below Melbourne at roughly 63.5%. Fresh coffee is lowest in Brisbane and Adelaide, not Brisbane alone at 30%; the chart shows about 34.5%. The final comparison is unfinished. The response is also 34 words below the 150-word minimum, with eight prompt words excluded from the count. Include a complete, accurate overview and more key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an overview and then comparisons, and linking expressions such as “Overall” and “In contrast” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is limited because the comparisons are incomplete and the final sentence stops at “in H,” leaving the reader without a finished point. Some transitions do not express a logical relationship: “Whereas” introduces no complete contrasting clause, and “While” is followed by another fragment. The overview also repeats the same comparison pattern without clearly grouping the three measures. Use complete paragraphs and sentences, organise the data into clear comparisons, and finish each point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “survey,” and “bought,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “had largest proportion,” “largest ratio,” and “minor change.” “Change” is unsuitable because the chart compares cities rather than changes over time. Spelling errors—including “Whearase,” “percenatge,” “Melbourn,” and “Adelaida”—are frequent enough to distract, while repeated use of “percentage” and “proportion” makes the description less precise. Choose standard terms such as “share” or “figure,” check spelling, and use vocabulary that accurately describes a static comparison.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including contrast clauses beginning with “In contrast” and “While,” and the opening sentence communicates the chart topic. However, the range is limited, and errors recur in sentence construction and verb forms. For example, “the proportion of went to a cafe” lacks a grammatical structure after “of”; “had increased” and “had declined” use past perfect for trends that the chart does not show; and “the largest proportion in Melbourne” needs a clearer construction such as “the highest figure was in Melbourne.” The “Whereas” clause is incomplete, and the final sentence is unfinished. Practise complete comparisons using accurate subject–verb structures and simple present-tense reporting verbs.

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