Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate the information about some people purchase coffee and tea drinking habit in five australian

cities . The overall percentage of coffee and tea in residents start the 20./. to 70 percent . in the write the information in different city and the reporting the maian feature . INfirst of all the city of sydeny in percent of coffee and tea 43./. start and of 61 percent .however the city of melbourne the drinking system start of 43 ./. and end of 6 percent . And the next then the city brisbane coffee and tea synalo start the 34./. and end of 55 percent and the other one city alelaide in coffee and tea drinking habit the start of 34./. and finished in 49 percent . And last one the city of hobart in tea and coffee habit start with 38./. and end then63 percent . however the write the information and comparison with relevent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the five cities and attempt to report figures for each, so the response is connected to the chart. However, it does not clearly summarise the three separate activities: fresh coffee purchases, instant coffee purchases, and café visits. Phrases such as “start” and “end” make the figures sound like stages or a range, rather than distinct categories, and the overview about percentages starting at 20% and reaching 70% merely repeats the axis scale. Some reported café figures are broadly close, but Melbourne’s “end of 6 percent” is inaccurate, and the other two series are largely omitted. To make the report more complete, identify the main pattern—that café visits are generally highest and fresh coffee purchases lowest—and compare the categories accurately across cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to move through the cities in sequence, using phrases such as “first of all,” “the next,” and “last one.” This gives the response some order, but the ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure. The opening, overview, and city-by-city details run together, and the final sentence repeats that a comparison is being made without providing one. Connections such as “however” do not consistently show a contrast between the figures. Separate the introduction and overview from the details, then group comparisons by activity or clearly compare each city using the same categories. This would make the progression easier to follow and reduce the impression of a list of disconnected figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “city,” and “coffee and tea,” but vocabulary is repetitive and often too imprecise to describe the chart. Expressions such as “drinking system,” “start,” and “end” do not clearly identify whether a figure refers to buying fresh coffee, buying instant coffee, or visiting a café. There are also frequent spelling and word-form problems, including “sydeny,” “alelaide,” and “maian,” which make the report harder to understand. Build a more accurate set of chart vocabulary and use the activity labels consistently. For example, distinguish “bought fresh coffee” from “went to a café,” rather than referring generally to coffee and tea habits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple statements and some linking structures, but sentence control is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. The opening, “The line graph illustrate,” has subject–verb disagreement, and phrases such as “the city of melbourne the drinking system start of 43” lack a clear grammatical structure. Articles, verb forms, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as seen in “in the write the information” and the long run-on sections separated by full stops and spaces. Use short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “In Sydney, 44% bought fresh coffee, while 61% visited a café.” Then practise joining comparisons with accurate “while” or “whereas” clauses.

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