Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart compares the survey about people buying tea and coffee and drinking habits in five cities of Australia.
Overall, Melbourne and Hobart had the highest percentage while Adelaide had the lowest.
In Melbourne and Hobart, highest number of people went to a cafe for a coffee or tea in last 4 weeks as compared to to other 3 cities. Followed by Sydney 60%. In Hobart, 37% of people brought fresh coffee and 45% in Melbourne and 44% in Sydney. whereas, Brisbane and Adelaide the ratio of people who drink fresh coffee is same 36%.
On the other hand, Hobart and Brisbane had the largest percentage in bought instant coffee 54%. Moreover, Sydney about 45%, Melbourne about 47% bought instant coffee. Brisbane about 54% people bought instant coffee.
In conclusion, Hobart, Melbourne and Sydney are the most highest addicted to coffee and tea as comparison to other cities and least Adelaide.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify relevant overall patterns, including café visits being high in Melbourne and Hobart and Adelaide generally having lower figures. You also report several data points, such as Sydney’s café figure and the similar fresh-coffee proportions in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the overview is too broad: Melbourne and Hobart are not highest across all measures, and Adelaide is not lowest for every category. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: café visits were about 63–64% in Melbourne and Hobart, while instant coffee was highest in Hobart, not equally in Hobart and Brisbane. The fresh-coffee figures are also misreported. Select the clearest comparisons and check each figure against the chart to make the summary more accurate and complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, two detail paragraphs and a concluding sentence. The grouping of café and fresh-coffee information before instant coffee gives the reader some direction. However, progression is weakened by repeated or awkward links, such as “Moreover” followed by another statement about Brisbane, which repeats the previous figure. “On the other hand” does not express a clear contrast between the categories, and the final conclusion largely repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison. Improve cohesion by grouping related figures consistently and using linking phrases only when they show a genuine relationship. Clearer references to the cities and categories would also make the comparisons easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “bought instant coffee” and “went to a cafe,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “highest number” for percentages, “brought fresh coffee,” and “most highest addicted.” The phrase “people who drink fresh coffee” also changes the chart’s measure, which is buying rather than drinking. These choices make parts of the report less precise. Aim for consistent, accurate terms such as “proportion of residents,” “purchased fresh coffee” and “visited a café.” A wider set of comparison expressions would help you describe the data without repeating “percentage” and “people.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to interpret. For example, “In Melbourne and Hobart, highest number of people went” is missing an article and a clear grammatical structure, while “as compared to to other 3 cities” contains a repeated preposition. The sentence beginning “whereas, Brisbane and Adelaide” is not properly connected to the preceding sentence, and “Hobart, Melbourne and Sydney are the most highest” has faulty comparative construction. Work on articles, sentence boundaries, and forming comparisons; for example, write “The proportions in Brisbane and Adelaide were similar” as a complete sentence. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons clearer.
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