Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided bar chart enumerates the outcome of a aassessment about the people taking part in five different Australian cities for buying tea, coffee and drinking habits.

Generally speaking, the ratio of city residents are on top in Mellbourne and Hobart both of them whereas, Adelaide

are the least participant.

looking at tea and coffee proportion where the Hobart are on Peak followed by the Mellbourne has 63% on the other hand Adelaide least point which is fourty nine points. Furthermore, the numbers of Brisbane are on 56%.

Turning to the instant coffee and fresh coffee, most of the resident

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and report some relevant café figures, including Hobart at about 63%, Melbourne at 63%, Adelaide at about 49%, and Brisbane at 56%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: saying residents are “on top in Melbourne and Hobart” does not specify which measure is highest, and Adelaide is not lowest for every category. The response also stops just as it begins discussing fresh and instant coffee, leaving the main comparisons and much of the data unreported. At 100 words, it is 50 words below the required minimum, which contributes to the task being addressed only partially. Include a clear overview and compare all three activities across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response, first introducing the chart, then giving a general statement, and finally using “Turning to” to introduce the coffee-purchase measures. This gives the reader some sense of direction. However, the progression is incomplete because the final paragraph ends mid-idea (“most of the resident”), and the comparisons are not developed into a complete account. Linking phrases such as “whereas” and “Furthermore” are used, but the relationships between the figures are sometimes unclear. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the key comparisons, and ensure each paragraph develops one clear point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “ratio,” “proportion,” and “residents,” and attempts phrases such as “Generally speaking” and “Turning to.” This shows a basic range for describing data. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “enumerates the outcome of a assessment” is not a suitable description of a survey, “on Peak” is awkward, and “least participant” does not clearly describe the lowest percentage. There are also spelling errors, including “Mellbourne” and “fourty.” Choose standard chart language and accurate collocations, such as “the proportion of residents,” “reached a peak,” and “the lowest figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “Generally speaking, the ratio of city residents are on top in Mellbourne and Hobart both of them whereas…” However, control is inconsistent, and errors often make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Examples include the article and repeated-letter error in “a aassessment,” subject–verb disagreement in “the ratio … are,” and the incomplete construction “Adelaide are the least participant.” The sentence beginning “looking at tea and coffee proportion” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, while the final sentence is unfinished. Build accurate simple sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and sentence completion, then add comparisons using controlled clauses.

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