Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrate the outcome of a survery about individual who buy coffee or tea and drinking habits in five different cities of Australia.

As per the given data, sydney,melbourne,and hobart have the highest numbers of people who went cafe for buying tea or coffee which is above 60% of the residents in past 4 weeks. whereas as the least number is recorded in fresh coffee from all five cities and it is nearly around 43% or lower.

And at the other hand people who bought instant coffee in last 4 week is fluctuated in each cities and the percenatage falls and up from 45 % to 54% which lies on medium level but the highest figure was seen in hobart which was around 55%.

Thus, the bar chart explain the figures of individual who went to cafe for buying coffee and tea from past 4 week in 5 different cities of Australia and surprising most of the residents buy both coffee and tea when they went cafe and the least numbers were recorded for fresh coffe.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important features: café visits are highest in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, and instant coffee reaches its peak in Hobart. However, the overview is incomplete and some comparisons are imprecise. Fresh coffee is not the lowest category in every city: café visits are lower in Adelaide, at about 49.5%, than fresh coffee there, at about 34.5%—so fresh coffee is still lower in that city, but the response’s claim that it is “nearly around 43% or lower” does not clearly summarise the full pattern. More importantly, the café figure in Brisbane is also above 55%, and Adelaide’s is just below 50%; these distinctions are not reported. Develop a clearer overview and support it with accurate city-by-city comparisons rather than repeating general statements in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to selected comparisons and a concluding summary. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “whereas” and “at the other hand” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is limited: the second and final paragraphs repeat the café and fresh-coffee points, while the middle paragraph gives only a broad range for instant coffee. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “And at the other hand,” and the opening comparison does not smoothly connect the three cities named. Organise the body by category or by notable city comparisons, and use linking expressions only where the relationship is clear. A concise overview followed by two focused comparison paragraphs would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “residents,” “percentage,” “highest,” “least,” and “fluctuated,” so the reader can generally understand the topic and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “highest numbers” for percentages, “went cafe for buying,” and “falls and up.” Repetition of “figures,” “people,” and “coffee” also makes the report less precise. Spelling errors such as “survery,” “percenatage,” and “coffe” are noticeable and weaken control. Aim for accurate chart language, for example “the proportion of residents who visited a café” and “varied between approximately 45% and 55%.” Check spelling and choose verbs that describe the data precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a clause beginning “whereas” and a concluding sentence introduced by “Thus.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “people who bought instant coffee … is fluctuated” combines an incorrect verb form with faulty agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic in “went cafe” and “whereas as the least number is recorded.” Capitalisation and punctuation, including the lower-case city names and missing spaces after commas, need attention. Practise accurate present-tense reporting and build comparisons with clear patterns such as “The proportion was highest in…” and “By contrast, …”

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