Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the results of a survey about people's cofee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Overall, cofee and tea buying and drinking habits went to a cafe for cofee or tea in last four weeks increase and bought instant cofee in last four weeks in decrease however, the bought fresh cofee in last four weeks in the Melbourne fell down.

In Sydney, the went to a cafe for cofee or tea is rise at 62% and bought istant cofee in last 4 weeks decrease at 45% then, the bought fresh cofee in last 4 weeks down at reach in 44%.

By comparison, Brisbane and Adelaide went to cafe or tea 55% declained and Adelaide fell down 49%. bought instant cofee in the Brisbane and Adelaide brisbane has increase and Adelaide decrease Similarly,bought fresh cofee same position in 34% Hobart has increased went to a cafe for cofee or tea in last 4 weeks 64% and bought instant cofee in last fell down 54%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include some relevant comparisons, such as café visits being high in Sydney and Hobart and fresh-coffee figures being similar in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: café visits are the highest category in four cities, while instant coffee leads in Adelaide. The claim that café visits “increase” and instant coffee “decrease” suggests change over time, which this chart does not show. Several details are missing or inaccurate: for example, Melbourne’s café figure is not reported, and the Brisbane and Adelaide instant-coffee comparison is not made clearly. Focus on cross-city comparisons and report the three categories consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an opening, an attempted overview, and city-based details, so there is some paragraphing and a basic effort to organise the information. However, the progression is difficult to follow because comparisons are incomplete and ideas are joined in confusing ways. The overview’s “however” does not clearly connect the trends, while the final paragraph moves between Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart without a clear sequence. Linking words such as “By comparison” and “Similarly” are attempted, but their relationships are not always clear or accurate. Group the information by category or by city, then use a consistent order and clear comparison phrases to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “survey,” “bar chart,” “instant coffee,” and “café,” and you attempt language for describing figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand, such as “habits … increase,” “down at reach,” and “same position.” Repeated use of “cofee” and “istant” also shows noticeable spelling errors. Choose precise verbs that match the chart: it compares percentages rather than showing changes over time. Practise common reporting phrases such as “accounted for,” “was higher than,” and “stood at,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use more than one sentence pattern, including an overview with contrast and sentences beginning “In Sydney” and “By comparison.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the went to a cafe … is rise” has an incorrect verb construction. Several clauses are joined without clear sentence boundaries, particularly in the final paragraph, and articles and prepositions are often missing or misplaced. Build shorter, complete sentences first, using accurate forms such as “the proportion who visited a café was…”; then combine ideas with controlled linking clauses.

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