Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The plot in figure demonstrates the conclusion of a survey about nationals coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five australian urban areas.

Overall,it can be seen that highest number of residents of Melbourne went to cafe for coffee or tea while other the other hand people of Hobart bought instant coffee largely according to graph.

First of all we wil discuss people of different metropolitan areas who bought fresh coffee in which the highest number of indiviuals are from Sydney mainly 44% then comes Melbourne with 42% and other areas.secondly we will observe largest number of residents who bought instant coffee in four weeks in which the highest ratio of people are from Hobart approximately 54% and then comes Brisbane with only 52% and then Sydney,Melbourne,Adelaide with even smaller ratio.

Moreever,if we move toward the number of national who went to cafe for coffee or tea last month in which more ratio comes from Melbourne with 63% because it has largest number of cafe in the whole world than any other city thencomes Hobart with slightly less number at 62% and other cities are below them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the three survey activities and give a relevant overview, noting café visits as a leading activity and instant coffee as especially popular in Hobart. Several key comparisons are also accurate: Sydney has the highest fresh-coffee figure, and Hobart and Melbourne are among the leaders for café visits. However, the overview is partly unclear: Melbourne, not Hobart, has the highest café figure, narrowly ahead of Hobart. Some reported figures and rankings are inaccurate or imprecise, including Brisbane’s instant-coffee figure (about 53%, not 52%) and the café comparison. The claim that Melbourne has the world’s largest number of cafés is not supported by the chart. To strengthen the response, report the main patterns more precisely and avoid adding explanations not shown in the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the three categories. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the body is sometimes mechanical, with repeated sequencing such as “First of all,” “secondly,” and “then comes,” rather than grouping comparisons clearly. The overview’s contrast, “while other the other hand,” is confusing, and the final paragraph combines a data comparison with an unsupported explanation. Some punctuation and spacing also make the flow harder to follow. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, describe the café figures across cities together—and use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of task-related vocabulary, including “survey,” “residents,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “went to cafe for coffee or tea,” so the subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “metropolitan areas” and “ratio.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “the conclusion of a survey” does not mean its results, “nationals coffee” is unclear, and “more ratio comes from Melbourne” is not idiomatic. Spelling and word-form slips such as “indiviuals,” “Moreever,” and “thencomes” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart language and natural collocations, such as “survey results,” “proportion of residents,” and “visited a café.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while” and “in which,” and the main topic is usually understandable. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or awkwardly joined. For example, “First of all we wil discuss people … in which the highest number…” does not form a clear grammatical sentence, while “then comes Hobart” shifts awkwardly from the preceding structure. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and punctuation, as in “went to cafe” and “Overall,it,” and the opening phrase “nationals coffee” lacks a clear grammatical relationship. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check articles and agreement, and separate long comparisons with appropriate punctuation.

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