Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrate the outcomes of survey about individual cooffee, tea perchasing and drinkinking habits among five Australian cities. Highest rate in melboutne and then hobart is noted in last four week for individual who went to a coffee or tea in australia.however in sydney about 60% of individual went to cafe for coffee .. the most deline rate in brought fresh coffee in autralia is brisbane and then relativey closer adelaidee.hobart individual bought instant coffe upto 55%.so i wrap up by this that sydney is highr in brought fresh coffe and then melbourne but the brisbane rate is very low in that . on other side overvall hobart individual rate is on the whole is good

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s general subject and mention relevant features, including café visits being high in Melbourne and Hobart, fresh-coffee purchases being low in Brisbane and Adelaide, and instant coffee reaching about 55% in Hobart. However, the response reports only a few figures and includes a significant misreading: Sydney is not the highest city for fresh coffee; its rate is about 44%, while Melbourne is close at 42.5%, and Brisbane and Adelaide are lowest. The overview is also unclear, and the final claim that Hobart is “good” does not specify which measure. The response is 117 words, below the required 150, so important comparisons are left undeveloped. Add a clear overview and accurately compare all three categories across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to group information through contrasts such as “however” and “on other side,” and the response moves between café visits, fresh coffee and instant coffee. However, ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview followed by organised comparisons, and several points run together in a single block. The sequence from Melbourne and Hobart to Sydney, then fresh coffee and instant coffee, makes the relationships difficult to follow. Some linking expressions do not clearly connect the ideas, while the conclusion repeats a vague judgement rather than summarising the main pattern. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the key data, and connect each comparison explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some task-related vocabulary, including “rate,” “survey,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “went to a cafe,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors make the writing harder to understand: examples include “cooffee,” “perchasing,” “drinkinking,” and “autralia.” Several expressions are not natural for describing chart data, such as “most deline rate,” “individual rate is on the whole is good,” and “brought fresh coffee.” Choose precise reporting language and check spelling carefully. For example, use “proportion of residents” rather than “rate of individual,” and “purchased” rather than “brought” when describing buying habits.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an attempt to form longer sentences and use contrast, as in “however in sydney about 60% of individual went to cafe,” but sentence structures are very limited and errors frequently affect clarity. The opening lacks subject–verb agreement and articles (“The chart illustrate the outcomes of survey”), while “individual who went” has an unclear singular form and “in last four week” has faulty number and article use. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, with sentence boundaries unclear in places. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “while” or “whereas.” Check agreement, articles, plurals and sentence endings before submitting.

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