Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar-graph illustrates the drinking habits of people by buying coofe and tea in five diffrent cities of Austrilia.

It is clearly seen that, Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart is in the top of the chart while Adeline and Brisbane is the lowest one in last 4 weeks.

Looking into the chart, in Melbourne peopel went to cafe for coffee or tea is the highest around with 64 percent and bought instant cofee is the second around with 47 percent and bought fresh on is the least with 44 percent. Similarly in Hobart cafe one is the in the top with 63 percentr and instant coffe is in second with 54%and fresh is the lest preffred. Likewise, in sydney go to cafe for tea and coffee is highest and fresh is the least with 43% by make instant coffee in second by 46 percent.

On the other hand, in Adelaide instant coffee is more consume by 50% of people making cafe on second by 47% nad fresh one less drinking by 33%. Whereas, in Brisbane cafe is in the top by 55% and instant is second by 52% and third is fresh by 32%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three activities and compare all five cities, with several figures that broadly match the chart—for example, café visits are highest in Melbourne and Hobart, while instant coffee is prominent in Brisbane and Hobart. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because it lacks a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. The claim that Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart are “in the top” is vague and does not specify which activity is being compared; Adelaide and Brisbane are not simply the lowest across all measures. Some figures are also inaccurate, such as Melbourne’s fresh-coffee figure (about 42.5%, not 44%) and Brisbane’s fresh-coffee figure (about 34.5%, not 32%). State the overall contrasts clearly, then support them with carefully selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, a broad statement, and comparisons that move through the cities. Linking expressions such as “Similarly,” “Likewise,” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships, and the reader can generally follow the city-by-city account. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, and the overview does not establish a clear organising principle for the details. The long paragraph also groups several comparisons together, making it harder to distinguish the main patterns from individual figures. Organise the body around meaningful comparisons—for example, café visits versus coffee purchases, or the cities with the highest and lowest results—and use clearer sentence boundaries and references to connect the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “bar-graph,” “instant coffee,” “fresh,” and “percent,” so the topic is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the description less precise. Phrases such as “fresh one less drinking,” “cafe one,” and “is more consume” are not natural ways to describe survey results, while misspellings such as “coofe,” “diffrent,” and “Austrilia” are noticeable. Use standard chart-reporting language consistently, such as “the proportion who bought,” “accounted for,” and “was the least popular.” Check spelling carefully and avoid replacing the activity labels with unclear shorthand such as “fresh one.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons introduced by “Whereas” and “Similarly.” Nevertheless, control is uneven: errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction occur throughout and sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart is in the top” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “people went to cafe … is the highest” combines incompatible verb structures. Several sentences also run together without clear punctuation, as in the Sydney comparison. Build each sentence around a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and tense. For instance, write “The proportion visiting cafés was highest in Melbourne” rather than combining “went” with “is.”

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