Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided bar graph illustrates the drinking habits and percentage of coffee and tea buying in five different cities in Australia namely, Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall, it is clear that,,,,,,,,,,

Turning to the details of fresh coffee in it is clear that only 47% people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in Sydney and closely followed by Melbourne at about 43%. Moreover, there was significant decreased in Brisbane and Adelaide where people bought fresh coffee at about 32% and 34% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and names all five cities, then reports some fresh-coffee figures for Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane and Adelaide. However, it covers only one of the three categories and omits Hobart, so it does not provide a meaningful summary of the main features or comparisons. The overview is unfinished—“Overall, it is clear that,,,,,,,,,,”—and the response ends without completing the report. Some figures are also inaccurate: Sydney is approximately 44%, not 47%, and Brisbane is about 34.5%, rather than 32%; small differences are acceptable, but these are less close to the chart. The response is 85 words, below the required 150. To improve, complete the overview and compare all three categories across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the report: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview paragraph and then a detail paragraph. The sequence from the chart’s general subject to fresh-coffee figures is understandable, and “Moreover” and “where” attempt to connect information. However, the overview consists only of an unfinished phrase and punctuation, so it provides no progression or guidance for the reader. The report also stops abruptly after Adelaide, with no coverage of the other categories or a concluding comparison. “Turning to the details” signals a shift, but the paragraph does not develop a complete set of details. Use a complete overview, group related comparisons into clear paragraphs, and connect each point with accurate, purposeful linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the chart and its subject, with relevant terms such as “bar graph,” “percentage,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “closely followed.” These choices make the limited information understandable. There is some attempt at more descriptive language in “significant decreased,” but the phrase is not idiomatic and its meaning is unclear in this context; “a marked decline” or “a lower proportion” would be more suitable. “Drinking habits and percentage of coffee and tea buying” is also an awkward description of the chart, which reports purchasing and café visits. The range remains narrow because the response discusses only one category. Build a wider set of accurate terms for proportions, rankings and comparisons, and use them to describe all three series.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response shows some control of basic sentence forms, including the opening sentence and the comparison structure “Sydney and closely followed by Melbourne.” It also attempts a longer sentence beginning “Moreover,” to report figures for Brisbane and Adelaide. However, grammatical errors are noticeable: “only 47% people” needs an article or a different construction, and “in last 4 weeks” needs “the” before “last.” In “there was significant decreased,” the noun phrase and verb form are not correctly constructed. The overview is not a complete sentence, and the repeated commas make the punctuation unclear. Use complete sentences throughout, check articles and verb forms, and vary sentence structures while keeping comparisons grammatically clear.

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