Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrate the result of buying coffee tea and drinking habbits in five cities in australia

Overall, It can clearly be seen that went to a cafe for coffee or tea in melbourne was the most highest interest habbit (67%)comparison brought fresh coffee in brisbane and represent

(34%) it is the lowest percentage.

Display the brought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks consider sydney become highest consumption number of (43%). 42 per cent city residents in sydney brought fresh cofee which is the second favorite habbit of them comparison brought instant cofee in hobart figure of (54%) which is the highest

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview by noting café visits and fresh-coffee purchases, but the response addresses the task only minimally. The overview misreports Melbourne’s café figure as 67% (about 63.5%) and calls it the highest, although Hobart is marginally lower at about 63%; it also describes Brisbane’s fresh-coffee figure as the lowest, overlooking Adelaide’s similar figure. The later comparison is unclear and contradictory: Sydney is first called the highest for fresh coffee, then 42% is attributed to Sydney, while the chart shows about 44%. Several cities and key comparisons are omitted, and there is no adequate summary of all three categories. The response is also 47 words below the required minimum. Develop a clear overview and support it with accurate comparisons across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. However, the ideas do not progress clearly, and the final paragraph combines unrelated comparisons without explaining their relationship. For example, “Display the brought fresh coffee…” shifts abruptly from Sydney’s fresh-coffee figure to Hobart’s instant-coffee figure. The phrase “comparison brought…” is repeated but does not make the comparison clear, and the incomplete ending leaves the final point unresolved. Use separate, logically ordered paragraphs for the overview and key details, and connect comparisons with precise links such as “whereas” or “by contrast.” Clearer sentence boundaries and references would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “city residents,” “fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. “Most highest interest habbit” is not a natural way to describe the largest proportion; “highest proportion of residents” would be clearer. “Consumption number” is also unsuitable because the chart reports survey percentages, not consumption quantities. Spelling errors such as “habbits,” “cofee,” and “brought” (for “bought”) further reduce precision. Build a small set of accurate terms for describing survey results and use them consistently, rather than repeating “habbit” or using “brought” for purchases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows an attempt to form longer sentences and an overview, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. The opening “The bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “went to a cafe … in melbourne was” does not form a clear grammatical subject. The phrase “42 per cent city residents in sydney brought…” is missing a determiner or preposition, and the final sentence fragment beginning “comparison brought instant…” is incomplete. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, with sentence boundaries and parentheses used awkwardly. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses—for example, “Hobart had the highest instant-coffee figure, at about 55%.”

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