Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided, bar chart illustrates survey about some people's buying tea ,coffee, and drinking habits there are five different Australian cities.

overall, by thoroughly analyzing the bar chart it is clear that Melbourne recorded the highest figure ,while Adelaide had the lowest figure in all Category.

On the other hand, Sydney 61% people prefer went to a cafe for coffee or tea as well as other public bought instant and fresh coffee the figure of 46% and 44%. Furthermore, The Melbourne 64% individual choose went to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include some relevant figures, such as Sydney’s café attendance at about 61% and fresh-coffee purchases at 44%. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it ends mid-sentence after “Melbourne 64% individual choose went to,” and gives no complete account of the three categories across the five cities. The overview is also inaccurate: Melbourne did not have the highest figure in every category, and Adelaide did not have the lowest in every category. For example, Hobart had the highest instant-coffee figure, while Adelaide had the lowest café attendance. The response is 86 words, below the required 150. To improve, complete the report, give an accurate overview, and compare the main highs and lows across categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the chart, an overview follows, and “On the other hand” and “Furthermore” introduce details. These signals show an emerging sense of sequencing. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview makes a broad claim that is not supported by the details, and the final sentence stops before its point is complete. The response also shifts abruptly from general statements to Sydney and then Melbourne, without covering the remaining cities or categories. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and comparisons, and group information by category or by cities with similar patterns. Ensure each sentence is complete and that linking phrases express the relationship between ideas accurately.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “figure,” “category,” and “survey,” so the reader can recognise the topic and the kind of information being described. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “recorded the highest figure.” However, several choices are awkward or imprecise, including “people prefer went to a cafe” and “other public bought instant and fresh coffee”; these make the intended meaning harder to understand. “Thoroughly analyzing” is also unnecessary for a chart summary and does not describe a specific feature. Aim for accurate collocations such as “visited a café” and “residents bought instant coffee,” and use the chart’s category labels consistently. A broader, more precise range would help you report comparisons clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including an overview with “while” and a sentence beginning “On the other hand.” Some basic meaning is understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “illustrates survey” is missing an article, “people prefer went” combines incompatible verb forms, and “The Melbourne 64% individual choose went” has problems with word order, agreement and verb form. The final sentence is incomplete, so its structure and meaning cannot be fully followed. Capitalisation and punctuation are also uneven, as in the lowercase “overall” after a full stop and the comma spacing in “figure ,while.” Practise complete subject–verb sentences and check articles, verb forms and sentence endings before submitting.

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