Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart Illustrate the result of servey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habbits in five australian cities namely sydney , melbourne,brisbane , adalaide, hobart

Overall,It can clearly be seen that 63% of city residentns went to a cafee for cofee or tea which is the highest percentage comparison briston liked (34%) which is the lest figure of brought fresh cofee

Looked the detail on went to a cafe for cofee

63 per cent city recident like to brought frest cofee which is the highest proportion. While, hobart figure of (62%) brought instant cofee in malbourn was less than adelaide 47%and 50%

Whereas,42percent for melbourn 34 per cent for adelaide for brought fresh cofee

Focused on brought instant cofee in sydney consist (46%) accounts for hobart 54 per cent However, brisbane reprecent higher than adelaide figure of (55%) and (50%) brought fresh cofee brisbane and adelaide consupmtion consist (33%) and (34%) respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts to report figures for all five cities, including café visits and fresh and instant coffee purchases. However, the main features are not accurately or clearly summarised. The overview says that 63% went to a café, but this is a peak for Hobart and Melbourne, not a general figure for city residents; it also compares this with Brisbane’s fresh-coffee figure in a confusing way. Several details are misassigned: the 63% figure is described as people who “like to brought frest cofee,” and the café and instant-coffee figures are mixed together. A clearer overview should state that café visits were generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee was usually the least popular, then support this with correctly matched city figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview and further detail, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Whereas” and “However” show an effort to connect points. Nevertheless, the information is not arranged coherently: the paragraph beginning “Looked the detail on went to a cafe” does not clearly develop the café data, and the following sentences shift between café visits, fresh coffee and instant coffee without a consistent comparison. Some links also create unclear relationships, as in “While, hobart figure … in malbourn was less than adelaide.” Group the cities or activities systematically, and use each paragraph to compare one clearly identified set of data. This would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “highest proportion,” “accounts for” and “respectively,” and it attempts to describe comparisons. However, the range is basic and repeated, while frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make several points difficult to understand. Examples include “servey,” “habbits,” “recidentns,” “brought” for “bought,” and “consupmtion” for “consumption.” Phrases such as “city resident like to brought” are also not natural ways to describe survey results. Use precise reporting language such as “the proportion of residents who visited a café” and check the spelling of key terms. More accurate vocabulary would help distinguish buying coffee from visiting a café.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is limited, and errors frequently obscure the intended relationships. For example, “The bar chart Illustrate” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “63 per cent city recident like to brought” lacks a clear grammatical structure and uses an incorrect verb form. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are also often missing or inconsistent, as in “hobart figure of (62%) brought instant cofee in malbourn was less than adelaide 47%and 50%.” Most sentences would benefit from a simple, complete structure: identify the city, name the activity, and give the percentage. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and punctuation before attempting more complex comparisons.

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