Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

THE BAR CHART COMPARES THE OUTCOMES OF A RESEARCH ABOUT PEOPLE'S COFEE AND TEA BUYING AS WELL AS DRINKING HABIT IN FIVE DIFFERENT AUSTRALIAN CITIES.

OVERALL, PEOPLE OF MELBOURNE CITY MOSTLY WENT TO A CAFE FOR COFEE OR A TEA WHILE, THE PEOPLE OF THE SAME CITY LEAST PREFER TO BUY FRESH COFFEE.

ACCORDING TO THE BAR GRAPH, PEOPLE OF MELBOURNE CITY HOLD FIRST RANK FOR WENT TO A CAFE FOR COFFEE OR TEA, WHICH WERE AROUND 63% IN FIGURE WHILE, HOBART CITY WAS SECOND WITH PROPORTION OF ABOUT 62%.NEARLY 61% INDIVIDUALS OF SYDNEY WENT TO A CAFE. WHILE, BRISBANE AND ADELAIDE SHOWED LEAST PROPORTION OF WENT TO A CAFE, WHICH WAS NEARLY 56% AND 46% RESPECTIVELY.

HOWEVER, PEOPLE WHO BOUGHT INSTANT COFFEE IN HOBART WERE HIGHEST COMPARE TO ALL CITIES, PROPORTION WAS NEARLY 54%. WHILE BRISBANE IS ON SECOND RANK WITH AROUND 53%, 50% IN ADELAIDE AND ABOUT 48% AND 46% IN MELBOURNE AND SYDNEY RESPECTIVELY. PEOPLE OF ALL CITIES WHO BOUGHT FRESH COFFEE WERE VERY LESS IN PROPORTION. SYDNEY HIGHEST AS COMPARE TO ALL CITIES WITH AROUND 44% WHILE NEARLY 43% IN MELBOURNE, CLOSELY 34% IN BRISBANE AND ADELAIDE AND AROUND 38% IN HOBART.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three activities and provide a clear overview, identifying café visits as especially popular and fresh coffee purchases as comparatively low. Most figures and rankings are accurately reported: Melbourne leads café visits, Hobart leads instant coffee purchases, and Sydney has the highest fresh-coffee figure. The overview is less precise, however: it says Melbourne residents “least prefer” fresh coffee, although Adelaide and Brisbane are lower, and it does not capture the broader pattern that café visits are the most popular activity in most cities. The detailed comparisons are relevant, but the main features could be selected and summarised more clearly rather than relying mainly on city-by-city figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing the three activities. The reader can follow the progression from café visits to instant and fresh coffee, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “while” help connect points. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some stronger organisation. To make the progression more fluent, avoid using “while” repeatedly to join fragments and make the relationship between comparisons explicit. For example, the final paragraph could group the highest and lowest figures for each activity in complete sentences. The overview should also guide the reader more clearly toward the key patterns developed in the body.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “highest,” “second,” and “bought instant coffee,” so the comparisons remain understandable. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “compares the outcomes” and “showed least proportion.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise: “hold first rank,” “least prefer,” and “very less in proportion” do not express the intended comparisons idiomatically. Spelling errors such as “cofee” and “cofee” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart-reporting collocations—“had the highest percentage,” “recorded the lowest figure,” and “accounted for”—and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while” and “which,” but control is inconsistent. Some sentences are understandable, yet errors in articles, agreement, and sentence construction recur. For example, “a research” and “a tea” use articles incorrectly, while “people … least prefer” and “which were around 63%” have faulty verb forms or agreement. Several comparisons are also written as fragments, such as “While, Brisbane and Adelaide showed…” and “while nearly 61% individuals…”. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles and singular/plural agreement. More accurate sentence patterns would make the data easier to interpret.

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