Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart ilustrates the proportion of Australians people buying coffee and tea and also drinking habits in five cities.

Overall,we can see that Hobart and Melbourne have almost the same percentage of people went to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks which is the maximum proportion in this bar chart.Whereas,Brisbane and Adelaide have the lowest proportion of residents bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks.

In Hobart,around 62% of people seem to went to a cafe for coffee or tea.Also for Melbourne it is also same as Hobart which is 62%.Meanwhile,residents in Brisbane and Adelaide people seen least to bought fresh coffee which around 34% for both.

But residents went to a cafe for coffee or tea in Brisbane is above a half (55%) and in Adelaide is a half(50%).Also in sydney it's accounts for 61%.

However,cities like Melbourne and Sydney people seen to bought fresh coffee above twice a fifth which is (42% and 44%) and hobart its below a fifth which is (38%).The proportion of people bought instant coffee in five cities (Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide and Hobart) which constitutes approximately 61%,64%,55%,49% and 54%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify relevant features, including café visits being highest in Melbourne and Hobart and fresh-coffee purchases being lowest in Brisbane and Adelaide. Several figures are also broadly accurate, such as about 55% for café visits in Brisbane and roughly 34% for fresh coffee in Adelaide and Brisbane. However, the overview is incomplete and some comparisons are inaccurate: Melbourne’s café figure is about 63.5%, not the same as Hobart’s 63%, and instant-coffee figures are reported as 61%, 64%, 55%, 49% and 54%, although the chart shows approximately 45.5%, 48.5%, 53%, 50% and 54.5%. The description also gives little attention to the overall contrast between café visits and instant-coffee purchases. Select the main patterns accurately and check each series before reporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview and further comparisons. This helps the reader recognise that you are describing the chart, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Meanwhile” and “However” show an attempt to connect points. However, the progression is not consistently clear. The discussion moves between café visits, fresh coffee and instant coffee without grouping the same measure across cities, and “Also” and “However” do not always express the relationship between the facts that follow. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “it is also same as Hobart.” Organise the body into clear comparisons—for example, café visits in one paragraph and coffee purchases in another—and use linking words only when their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “residents,” “constitutes” and “approximately,” so the reader can generally understand the subject and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “Australians people,” “people seen to bought” and “went to cafe.” Repetition of “people,” “proportion” and “coffee” also makes the description less precise. There are spelling and form errors, including “ilustrates” and “sydney,” which reduce control of written vocabulary. Aim for accurate, natural reporting phrases such as “the percentage of residents who visited a café” and “purchased instant coffee,” and vary your wording without using awkward alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including an overview beginning “Whereas” and comparisons introduced by “Meanwhile” and “However.” Nevertheless, many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Examples include “people went to cafe,” “people seem to went,” and “residents in Brisbane and Adelaide people seen least to bought,” where verb forms and sentence structure are faulty. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “a cafe” and the frequent missing spaces after commas. These problems recur across the response, rather than appearing only as occasional slips. Practise building complete comparison sentences with a clear subject and correctly formed verb, such as “The proportion of residents who visited a café was higher in Hobart than in Adelaide.”

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