Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Central Library 20 years ago

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the 20 years old plan central library had tables in the centre in the top right corner it had room for children's books where all the books a child can read was there , at the top left corner there was room for videos ,computer games in the bottom left and right there was reading room and enquiry desk and the entrance of old plan was bottom centre. now in the new plan with lot of changes like Cafe and lecture room were added . this time the children room have sofa in it was located in the top left corner below that all reference book and then in bottom left computer room in the right side on the top lecture room below that adult fictions books collection self service machine and at the bottom the Cafe. and entrance was the same as old bottom centre the new library have more things then the old one

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe the changes in the library floor plan, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical structure. While it identifies some features, the description is disorganized and lacks a clear comparison between the two time periods. The response reads more like a list of locations rather than a summary of key features and trends. It lacks a clear introduction and a concluding summary, which are essential for Task 1. The information is presented in a way that makes it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes, and the lack of paragraphing further hinders the clarity of the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of logical progression; the transition between the old plan and the new plan is abrupt and lacks cohesive devices. The use of linking words is almost non-existent, and the referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'below that all reference book'). The lack of paragraphing and the absence of clear signposting mean that the information is not arranged coherently, which significantly impacts the readability of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic directional language ('top right corner', 'bottom left') and simple nouns ('room', 'books', 'things'). There is no attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary to describe the changes, such as 'relocated', 'replaced', 'expanded', or 'transformed'. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'in the 20 years old plan' instead of 'in the library plan from 20 years ago'. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of punctuation, with many run-on sentences and a failure to use capital letters correctly. Verb tense usage is inconsistent, particularly when shifting between the past state and the current state. For example, 'the children room have sofa in it was located' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The response relies almost entirely on simple sentence structures, and there is no evidence of complex sentence forms. The frequent errors in basic sentence construction and punctuation make the text difficult to read.

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