Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Central Library 20 years ago
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram below presents the ground program of a community library 20 years ago and what it looks now.
Overall we can see that Entrance area is clean and many change in Adult fiction books has changed. One major change in computers videos games.
Firstly, CDs, videos, computer games has replaced, while today 2 sofa added with storytelling events children's fiction books large area. second change is reading room has replaced today for only computer room their. Third change is children's books area renovated now only for lecture room.
Secondly, One major change in Entrance in central library Tables and chairs has removed this day Entrance area is clear, one added previous time Adult non-fiction books has replaced information desk with self service machine, Enquiry desk tickets books returns etc, has changed now days only one cafe their one added item is adult fiction books has replaced only all reference books.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the changes in the library floor plan, but it fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two time periods. Several key features are described confusingly, such as the mention of 'computers videos games' and the vague description of the entrance area. The report lacks a clear structure, and the lack of precision in describing the spatial changes means the reader cannot form a mental image of the library's transformation. To improve, you must clearly identify the main trends and group related changes logically rather than listing them in a disjointed way.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' is present, but they are used mechanically and do not effectively link the ideas. The sentences within the paragraphs are often disconnected, and the referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'one added previous time'). The lack of clear transitions between the past and present states makes the progression of information difficult to follow. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices to show contrast and sequence, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus rather than a list of disparate observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which hinders communication. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'ground program' instead of 'floor plan' and 'replaced' used incorrectly to describe spatial changes. The phrasing is often repetitive and lacks the precision required for a report on a diagram. For example, 'one added item is adult fiction books has replaced only all reference books' is confusing and ungrammatical. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary related to describing changes, such as 'relocated,' 'converted,' 'expanded,' or 'demolished,' and practice using these in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede meaning. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'CDs, videos, computer games has replaced'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and verb, such as 'One major change in computers videos games.' The use of tenses is also inconsistent, making it difficult to distinguish between the past and present states. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing changes in a floor plan.
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