Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Central Library 20 years ago

Student answer (Band 4.5)

With the passage of time the way of thinking change as in every thing as life sytle is upgraded now.

The public library also add the factor according to the updated thought of life.

As the cd vides computer games room is replace by stroytelling events and children fiction books because the children are more interesting in story of people and event then a games or any thing they must be because be informatic is important and also by reading fictional stories they will able to creative of story.

Children books is replace by lecture room

Adult fictional and non fictional books replace by all reference book and information desk and self service machines which help for stranger to find any book or place

Reading room replace computer room and enquiry desk replace by cafe because enquiry is just for card who have or issued a book and reture it on mention date of card.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the library floor plan comparing the past and present. While the candidate identifies several changes, such as the replacement of the computer games room with a storytelling area and the introduction of self-service machines, the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed and confusing manner. Key trends and an overview are missing, which limits the development of the task. For instance, the transition of the children's books and adult fictional sections is stated, but the comparisons lack clarity and precise spatial referencing. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially, resulting in a band score of 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression and logical organisation. The response is written as a single, poorly structured block of sentences rather than being divided into appropriate paragraphs representing an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to a mechanical and confusing flow of information. For example, sentences such as 'Children books is replace by lecture room' and 'Reading room replace computer room' follow one another without linking words or clear referents to guide the reader through the spatial changes in the library layout. Paragraphing is completely neglected, placing this criterion firmly at a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by word-choice errors and incorrect derivations. Examples include 'cd vides computer games room', 'stroytelling', 'more interesting' instead of interested, and 'reture it on mention date'. There are also awkward phrasings like 'be informatic is important' and 'help for stranger'. While the candidate attempts to use topic-related vocabulary such as 'reference book', 'information desk', and 'self-service machines', the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies causes considerable strain and misunderstanding for the reader, aligning with the band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of structures and frequent, heavy errors. Simple sentences are often incorrectly constructed, and attempts at complex structures completely fail grammatically, as seen in 'As the cd vides computer games room is replace by stroytelling events...' and 'enquiry is just for card who have or issued a book and reture it on mention date'. Subject-verb agreement errors, missing articles, tense confusion ('change', 'is replace', 'will able to'), and severe punctuation omissions are pervasive, making the text difficult to parse and justifying a band score of 4.0.

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