Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Central Library 20 years ago

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE DIAGRAM SHOWS FLOOR PLAN OF A PUBLIC LIBRARY 20 YEars ago and how lt look now ,first of all i can check the oLD LIBRARY .

IN OLD LIBRARY SETUP WAS MAKE ENTRANCE 1ST ,RIGHT SIDE CONSIST OF ENQUIRY DESK ,T ICKETS , BOOK RETURNS AND OTHERS.

BUT LEFT SIDE HAD READING ROOM , NEWS PAPERS AND MOSTLY MAGZINES ARE AVAIBLE.

IN CENTER ONE SIDE HAD CONSIST OF ADULT NO-FICTION BOOKS BUT OTHER SIDE HAD ADULT FICTION BOOKS.

TABLES AND CHAOIRS WERE AVAILABLE IN THE CENTER OF THE LIBRARY BUT ON THE UPPER SIDE HAD CHILDREN BOOKS AND IN LEFT SIDE CDS , VEDIOS AND COMPUTER GAMES .

THESE ARE THE FEATURES OF CENTRAL LIBRARY OF 20 YEARS AGO.

SO NOW I CAN DESCRIBE TODAY LIBRARY, IT CONSIST OF ENTRANCE MAKE IN FRONT ,ONE SIDE OF FRONT CONSIST OF CAFE AND LEFT SIDE COMPUTER ROOM .

IN THE CENTER SELF SERVICE MACHINE ,INFORMATION DESK AND ADULT FICTION BOOKS AND OTHER SIDE HAVE ALL REFRENCE BOOKS .

IN UPPER PORTION ONE HAAL CONSIST OF SOFA STORYTELLING EVENTS OCCURS AND CHILDRENS FICTION BOOKS BUT THE OTHER SIDE HAVE LECTURE ROOM.

IN TODAY CENTRAL LIBRARY HAVE UPDATED LIBRARY WITH SOME NEW FUNTIONS

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarise the main features of the library floor plan comparing 20 years ago and today, but it falls short in several areas. The tone is heavily conversational and informal (e.g., 'first of all i can check', 'SO NOW I CAN DESCRIBE'), rather than academic or objective. While many key features are mentioned—such as the entrance, enquiry/information desk, reading room, and lecture room—the spatial relationships are described in a disjointed and confusing manner. Furthermore, the overview lacks a clear synthesis of the most notable changes, such as the overall modernisation and the replacement of reading spaces with computer and cafe facilities. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, earning a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is very weak, lacking proper paragraphing and a logical progression of ideas. The entire text reads as a fragmented list of observations rather than a cohesive report. Discourse markers and cohesive devices are either absent or conversational and inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response (e.g., 'first of all', 'SO NOW I CAN DESCRIBE'). Sentences are strung together with basic conjunctions or punctuation errors, and there is no clear referencing framework to guide the reader smoothly between the past and present layouts. This overall lack of structured cohesion corresponds to a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on words directly copied or poorly transcribed from the prompt (e.g., 'entrance', 'enquiry desk', 'computer room'). There are numerous spelling and word-form errors, such as 'MAGZINES' instead of magazines, 'AVAIBLE' instead of available, 'CHAOIRS' instead of chairs, 'REFRENCE' instead of reference, 'HAAL' instead of hall, and 'FUNTIONS' instead of functions. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for discussing diagram data, resulting in frequent errors that strain the reader and reflect a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by a lack of proper sentence boundaries, capitalization errors (e.g., writing in ALL CAPS in places, lowercase 'i'), and frequent missing auxiliary verbs and prepositions (e.g., 'SETUP WAS MAKE', 'ENTRANCE MAKE IN FRONT', 'TODAY CENTRAL LIBRARY HAVE UPDATED LIBRARY'). Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures fail due to severe structural errors. Punctuation is largely ignored or misused with comma splices. These pervasive inaccuracies lead to a band score of 4.0.

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