Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern world, owing a house is very difficult task so people are prefering to rent rather than owing it. Exploring the given issue, the forthcoming paragraphs considers positive outcomes of owing the house and elaboration of why I support this.
Owing a land or house can gives the freedom of decorating or remodelling as per convience or need. Remodelling the basic areas of house can bring joy as well as sense of establisment to the members of family. For instance, if family is living in rented house even for the small issue they have to contact the owner of house to solve the problem.Even they can build a garden or plant a tree as per their will which helps calming their mind after a chaotic or hectic schedule and it also serves as a playground for children.
Sense of achievement can be felt by the house owners as it consider as something that not all can achieve. It also brings the feeling of safety and hepls to avoid unnecessary arguments with owner of the house you are renting. To exemplify, rental individual are facing a financial issue regarding the rent which usually leads to heated arguments and browl.
In conclusion, even though owing a house in 21st century is next to impossible task but owing a house comes with numerous benefits. it provides emotional stability as well as peace, which are not easy to feel.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You give a clear overall view that owning a home is beneficial, and you offer relevant reasons: freedom to remodel, a sense of achievement and security, and fewer disputes with landlords. However, the response only partially addresses the question. The opening says people prefer renting, which conflicts with the task’s premise that home ownership is very important, and you do not explain clearly why people in some countries place such importance on owning. The positive/negative judgement is implied rather than directly stated and supported as a position. Examples such as contacting a landlord and creating a garden are relevant, but several points are asserted briefly rather than explained. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop the reasons and state your position explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The body paragraphs each focus on related benefits, and examples generally follow the points they illustrate. Basic linking phrases such as “For instance,” “To exemplify,” and “In conclusion” help the reader follow the discussion. However, progression is not always clear: the introduction refers to renting as the more common preference, while the task asks why ownership is important. Some connections between ideas are abrupt, particularly the move from remodelling to gardening and then children’s play. The conclusion repeats benefits without drawing together the reasons discussed. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the main point.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “remodelling,” “sense of achievement,” “emotional stability,” and “heated arguments.” These phrases show an attempt to express more than basic ideas. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make the writing less natural, such as “owing a land,” “as per convience,” “browl,” and “rental individual.” Repetition of “owing” and “house” also reduces variety. Choose more conventional expressions for home ownership and renting, and check spelling carefully. More precise language would help distinguish financial security, personal freedom, and emotional benefits rather than relying on broad claims.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if family is living in rented house” and a relative clause in “which usually leads to heated arguments.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward or difficult to process. Examples include “is very difficult task,” “people are prefering,” “can gives,” and “it consider as something,” which show problems with articles, verb forms, and agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: there is no space after the full stop in “problem.Even,” and the final sentence begins with a lowercase “it.” Practise accurate basic sentence patterns before adding longer clauses.
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