Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In some parts of the world, it is belived that having a home is far better than living in rental appartments. I unequivocally support this idea because in our own homes our sentiments are attatched.

To begin with, it is obvious that having a home gives us a purpose of life we develop sentiments for our community consequently try to do part in the well being of the society, we live in. For instance, we contribute in the regional politics, social services and relegious affairs, for the betterment of our society. Moreover, our devotios make us proud of being the active member of the community. Subsequently, this emotional attatchment to the vacinity keeps us alive, and finally drives us to build and live in our own homes.

I belive that we must build our homes as we have just one life to live on this planet. It is obvious that we are going to die one day. So if we have a home, it would be a lot easier to burry us in the near by graveyard. This will enable our future generations to come visit us. For an instance, if we live a nomade life, there will be no place on earth we may call home and will have nowhere to return to. This will lead us towards depression and anxiety.

In conclusion, it is crystel clear that having a hame makes us an effective member of the society, and that is totally a positive thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear positive position, especially in the opening and conclusion, and you offer reasons connected to community involvement and emotional security. However, the task asks both why home ownership matters and whether this is positive or negative; the first reason is partly relevant, but the discussion of being buried near one’s home and future generations visiting is not a convincing explanation of why people value owning a home. The claim that a nomadic life causes depression is also asserted rather than supported. The response therefore addresses the prompt only partially, with ideas that remain limited and under-developed. It is also three words below the required minimum. Develop relevant reasons such as stability, control over one’s living space, or long-term financial security, and explain each with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from purpose and community participation to emotional attachment and then home ownership without fully explaining the links. Similarly, the burial example interrupts the discussion of why owning a home is important. Some connectors, including “consequently” and “Subsequently,” feel mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely. Use fewer signposts and make each paragraph develop one central reason through explanation and relevant evidence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt some topic-related and less common vocabulary, including “emotional attachment,” “regional politics,” “social services,” and “depression and anxiety.” This gives you material to discuss community and personal security. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes distract the reader, as in “belived,” “attatched,” “relegious,” “devotios,” and “crystel.” There are also awkward or inaccurate combinations such as “contribute in the regional politics,” “purpose of life,” and “keeps us alive.” These choices make parts of the argument less natural, even though the general meaning is usually recoverable. Check spelling carefully and learn vocabulary in common phrases; for example, describe contributing “to local affairs” or feeling “a sense of belonging” rather than translating expressions word for word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including “if we live a nomade life, there will be no place on earth we may call home.” This shows some range, and the main message can generally be followed. However, several sentences contain faulty clause connections or incomplete grammatical patterns. For example, “having a home gives us a purpose of life we develop sentiments” joins two ideas without suitable punctuation or a linking word, while “we contribute in the regional politics” uses an incorrect preposition within the sentence pattern. The sentence beginning “So if we have a home” also shifts awkwardly into “it would be” without a clear conditional relationship. Use full stops to separate complete ideas, and review articles, prepositions, and conditional forms so complex sentences remain controlled.

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