Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some countries owning a home than renting is very important for everyone.

It is claimed that having a own home than ranting is very valuable.

In my opinion it is positive situation.

If a person have its own home there is no problem to pay the rent of house.There is a freedom in their own home.Every family had a dream to decorate their own homes. There are many lots of benefits to have their own home.If we have a own home the man most take care of our house.Everyone can sleep eaisly and have a peaceful dreams.If we have their own home there is no problem to shift to the other home with a lot of probems.Everyone can love their home as there family members.The money that give for a rent is used to spent on many other activities.Every family member have many proud of their own homes.Renting homes are in very small places and there is a big problem to adjust everyone in a renting home.I suggest that own a home is important

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear view—“In my opinion it is positive situation”—and give relevant reasons, including avoiding rent payments, having freedom to decorate, and feeling proud of a home. However, the response only minimally addresses the question: it does not explain in much detail why home ownership is especially important in some countries, and most reasons are listed rather than developed or supported. The conclusion, “I suggest that own a home is important,” repeats the general position without weighing the situation. The response is also 75 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to explain both parts of the task. Develop two or three reasons with examples and address the country-specific context more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic overall direction: it introduces the topic, gives a positive opinion, and then lists supporting points. Some links between ideas are understandable, such as the connection between owning a home and not paying rent. However, nearly all the reasons appear in one continuous paragraph, with no clear grouping or progression, and several sentences repeat the same point about having “their own home.” The repeated use of “If we have” and “Everyone” makes the sequence feel like a list rather than a developed argument. Use separate paragraphs for the explanation and your evaluation, and connect each reason to its consequence with clear, varied linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “rent,” “freedom,” “decorate,” and “benefits,” so the main subject is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes strains understanding. Examples include “a own home,” “ranting,” “many lots of benefits,” and “have many proud.” There are also spelling errors such as “eaisly” and “probems.” Aim for accurate topic-specific expressions and check spelling: for example, use “home ownership,” “financial security,” and “a sense of pride.” Avoid repeating “own home” by using suitable alternatives such as “property” or “a home of one’s own.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences are simple statements, and the repeated “If” clauses show an attempt to express conditions. However, grammatical control is weak and errors occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between people and actions unclear. For example, “If a person have its own home” has problems with subject–verb agreement and pronoun choice, while “Every family member have many proud” has agreement and sentence-structure problems. Articles and possessives are also often inaccurate, as in “a own home” and “their family members.” The response uses little variety in sentence structure, so practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms. Check agreement, articles, and pronouns carefully when revising.

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