Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In some countries owning a home rather than rather than renting house very important for people my opion on this. some people did not buy a house he did not many of money he creat a house after this only one thing is a renting a house is best one, some people did not have a lot of money to buy a house. in my country people a lot of money saving from his childrens education .in the develping country people easey to buy home and ease to rent a house. people a lot of money creat on this jobs and many people have a lot of own bussiness and many company. the developed countrys government have creat many of house sceem and many of bank alone ot people low interest rat. in this propur is ease way to buy a house and people.in this country rent a foadabilie and people have many jobs to have creat a ease port of life. in the poors countrys people is did not ease way to buy a hous and in this country people did not a good salary . and banks a have a lot of interest of alone. and rent house is not very well mantake and not good .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to address both questions: you suggest that income, savings, employment and bank loans affect whether people can buy homes, and you indicate that renting may be preferable for people who cannot afford ownership. However, the reasons are difficult to follow, and your view on whether home ownership being important is positive or negative is not stated clearly. The comparison between developed and poorer countries is also asserted rather than explained. The response contains 201 words, so it is 49 words below the required minimum; this limits the space available to develop your ideas. To improve, state your position directly and explain two relevant reasons with clear examples, ensuring you meet the minimum length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

There is a basic attempt to move from affordability to differences between developed and poorer countries, so some relevant ideas can be identified. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, with no clear introduction, body paragraphs or conclusion. Many points are joined by repeated “and” or full stops, as in “and banks a have a lot of interest of alone. and rent house…”, which makes the progression hard to follow. References such as “in this country” are unclear because the country being discussed is not consistently identified. Organise the essay into paragraphs, give each paragraph one main point, and use linking expressions to show cause, contrast and conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “renting,” “salary,” “banks,” “interest” and “jobs,” and you attempt to discuss affordability and living conditions. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the intended meaning difficult to understand, such as “alone” for “loan,” “foadabilie,” and “mantake.” Phrases such as “creat a house” and “ease way” are not natural collocations in this context. Build a topic vocabulary set and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “affordable housing,” “take out a loan,” and “maintained rental properties.” More precise vocabulary would help communicate your ideas without requiring the reader to guess.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express several connected ideas, and some basic sentence patterns are recognisable. However, sentence structure and grammatical control are inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “some people did not buy a house he did not many of money” combines clauses without correct linking and has an incomplete verb pattern. There are also problems with articles, plurals and agreement in phrases such as “renting house” and “people is did not.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with little accurate use of complex structures. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add clauses using “because,” “although” or “while.” Check articles and subject–verb agreement when editing.

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