Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

At this time it is popular that in the diffrent countries the people used to owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. In this case i think this is positive situation.

At first the owning a home is not popular rather then renting home is most popular at this time. it help for good living because it is not much costly for people thats why the renting is good . All people have their work part time or full-time people came to home for eat food and have to take rest. Renting is good for small family people but for the big member family it is quit not good because the all member need their room to live and people like to have their own room to live. many people think that the renting is good at all. renting case help to save their income for in futher investment to collect money.

In other hand the owning a home is also good for big member family. In some country people used to bye their own home for their family by their all life income. it is not good because from their income people can investment in diffrent sector of business. it help to make man strong for the futher. it is positive site for the case of renting home rather owning the home.

In conclusion, i am totally positive at the renting the home rather than owning home. In both side their is positive and negative situation. But the renting is quite good for many people at this time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall preference for renting, especially in the introduction and conclusion, and you mention relevant considerations such as saving income and the needs of larger families. However, the response does not fully answer both parts of the question. The reasons why home ownership is important in some countries are not clearly explained; instead, much of the essay argues that renting is preferable. Your position also becomes confusing when you call owning a home positive, then describe that view as “the positive site for the case of renting home rather owning the home.” Develop the cultural or financial reasons people value ownership, then explain directly whether you consider that preference positive or negative. The 12 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise an attempt to organise the discussion. Some ideas are grouped by topic, such as renting for small families and ownership for larger families. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently answer the task, and the contrast between renting and owning is sometimes unclear. Linking phrases such as “At first” and “In other hand” do not accurately signal the relationships between ideas, while “In conclusion” introduces a preference that is not consistently maintained. Use a clear paragraph plan—reasons for valuing ownership, then your evaluation—and connect each supporting point explicitly to the main argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to housing and family life, including “renting,” “owning a home,” “income,” and “investment,” and the general topic is usually identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning hard to understand. For example, “big member family” and “their all life income” are not natural ways to express family size or lifetime earnings, and “positive site” does not convey the intended meaning. Spelling errors such as “diffrent,” “futher,” and “bye” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for instance, use “large family,” “lifetime savings,” and “positive aspect.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, including a reason introduced with “because” and a contrast using “but.” However, sentence structures remain limited, and errors in basic grammar occur frequently enough to make some relationships unclear. Examples include “it help for good living,” “the all member need their room,” and “In both side their is positive and negative situation,” where agreement, articles, plurals or sentence construction need correction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase “i” and the run-on sequence “Renting is good for small family people but for the big member family…”. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although,” and “while.”

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