Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Every person always wants to make his/her own home.But it is quite difficult for some people.Beacause financial situation can't always support a person.so that time people always perfer to live a renting apartment.Home sweet home its a popular point of view for all.But in some countries owning a home is more complicated because of its high price,not everyone effort this.They can not bear a huge amount of money to buy a house.Thats why people can try to live a renting apartment.I think the highest price of house can be play a negative impact in some countries.people can not afford all the time this types of house.I believe that everybody can be aware in this situation.Specially the Government can played a significant role in this point.Otherwise an individual person can not change this situation.Everyone should be aware and responsible just like Government,the house owner,and the policy maker.Owning a home its a dream for any person.But they can afford this for many reasons.I think its play negative impact in some countries.For example when a person can not afford this and faces various types of challenges he/she can be frustrated.Government can be play a important role in this problem.They should try to solve this problem,and also they can be changes their policy about the renter.They should be limited the highest price and also aware the owner or landlord.Maximam person donot want to live a small apartment,they don't like a tiny bedroom,or a small kitchen area.But when they can afford a big house just because of the highest price its a bad thing for any county.Finally i want to say we should try to get a solution of this point of view,so that everybody can make his/her own house which can be very comfortable and peaceful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall view that high house prices make home ownership difficult and that this is a negative situation. You also suggest a possible response, saying the government should limit prices and change policies. However, the task asks why owning a home is important in some countries, and this part is only touched on through “Home sweet home” and the idea that it is a dream. Explain the reasons more directly—for example, security, cultural expectations, or investment—and develop them with specific support. Your discussion of the negative effects is also general: frustration and difficulty affording a larger home are mentioned, but not explored in detail. This leaves important parts of the task only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable overall direction: it introduces the difficulty of buying a home, states that this is negative, and ends with a proposed solution. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, so the reader has to follow a long sequence of points without distinct stages. Several ideas are repeated, including that people cannot afford houses and that the government should act. Linking phrases such as “That’s why,” “Otherwise,” and “Finally” are used, but they do not consistently show how one point develops from the previous one. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for reasons and effects, and a conclusion; use references and transitions to make the progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “owning a home,” “financial situation,” “landlord,” “policy maker,” and “afford.” This gives you a basic range for discussing housing and government action. However, the vocabulary is repetitive, especially “house,” “people,” “problem,” and “afford,” and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “live a renting apartment,” “highest price of house,” and “play a negative impact.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “Beacause,” “perfer,” and “Maximam,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of housing expressions and check collocations and spelling so your ideas sound natural and are easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify your main position. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence formation and verb patterns. For example, “the highest price of house can be play a negative impact” has an incorrect verb construction, while “Government can be played a significant role” also misuses the verb form. There are sentence fragments, such as “Because financial situation can’t always support a person,” and punctuation is often missing after sentence boundaries. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate subject–verb patterns, articles, and punctuation before adding longer clauses.

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