Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is argued that some peoples doesn't feel good or comfortable to live the renting house. There are face some critical problem first to find the owner of these houses. They find owner is very difficult and that's why some peoples feel bad to live in the renting houses. They effort to live of this that the owner of you.

On the one hand, somes people doest not effort our dream houses. They live automatically for renting whatever, they live our country or another country. But these people that live our houses they feel not good to live the rental houses for other because they can efford all types of house. For example; big dream houses of small

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes a limited attempt to address the topic, but it does not clearly explain why home ownership is important or state whether this is a positive or negative situation. The opening refers to discomfort with renting and difficulty finding a landlord, which could be relevant reasons, but these points are hard to follow and are not developed. The later discussion of “dream houses” does not establish a clear position or answer both parts of the question. The example, “big dream houses of small,” is incomplete. The response is also 132 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop relevant ideas. To improve, state your view directly, explain two reasons, and support each with a complete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph is followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” and linking expressions such as “first” and “For example” are used. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from one sentence to the next. For instance, “They effort to live of this that the owner of you” is difficult to connect to the preceding point, and the second paragraph shifts between people’s dream homes, renting, and affordability without explaining the relationships. The example at the end is unfinished, so the paragraph has no clear conclusion. Plan a simple sequence—reason, explanation, example—and use pronouns and linking phrases only when their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “renting,” “owner,” “houses,” and “dream houses,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts to express evaluation through phrases such as “feel good or comfortable” and “critical problem.” However, the vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or combinations make the intended meaning unclear, as in “They effort to live” and “live automatically for renting whatever.” Some forms are also inaccurate, such as “somes people” and “efford.” Build a more precise set of housing terms and practise natural combinations, for example “home ownership,” “rental property,” “housing costs,” and “financial security.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts a few different sentence patterns, including a reason clause with “that's why” and a contrastive opening, “On the one hand.” However, control of basic sentence grammar is inconsistent, and errors often make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “some peoples doesn't feel,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “There are face some critical problem,” which does not form a grammatical clause. The sentence “They find owner is very difficult” also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Most sentences are simple or incomplete, with little successful use of complex structures. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete clauses, articles, and plural forms before adding longer sentences.

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