Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The most necessary thing in human life is having a home to live in it , regardless if this home is big or small the felling of having a palce to return back to it when your are on your work or when you are aoutside is comfortable sense , nowdays a huge number of people in some countries have a conflict about the idea that owning home is more effectice than renting one the two sides have the freedom to think as they want but the crusior point is having a home .

In my prespective not all the people have the capacity to own a home as we all know that buying a home is very expensive and the price of home with only two rooms , kitchen and bathroom is over then five thousand dollar this price may be the paiment of six month for simple employee is he put all his money and buying a home how he will do to contiue his life without money so in this case the best solution is renting a simply home.

In the other hand owning home is for human who are already rich or they keep saving money at least for twenty years and in my opinion the one who owning a home at the first they were single they do not have a responsabilities of kids so they can divied his salary easily he keep some for his everday shopping and the rest he save it in a bank account this method is very useful to owning a hone.

at the end owning or renting home both have a positive impact on human moral beacuse the idea of having home is very cozy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions: you suggest that buying a home can be unaffordable for employees, and that owners may save for years or have fewer family responsibilities. However, the reasons are not developed clearly enough, and the response does not give a consistent answer to whether this situation is positive or negative. The final claim that both renting and owning have a positive impact does not directly evaluate the importance placed on ownership. The discussion also shifts between whether people need a home and whether they should own one, which leaves the central issue only minimally addressed. To strengthen the response, state a clear view on the social preference for ownership and explain the reasons with specific, logically connected examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “In the other hand” and “at the end” signal movement between points, and the reader can identify the broad contrast between renting and owning. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long sentences, and the relationship between them is not always clear. For example, the first paragraph moves from the comfort of having a home to a conflict about ownership without clearly connecting these points. The conclusion also introduces a general claim rather than resolving the argument. Use clearer topic sentences, separate distinct ideas, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to housing and personal finances, including “renting,” “buying a home,” “saving money,” “salary” and “bank account.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the topic. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or inaccurately chosen, and spelling errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “effectice” for “effective,” “felling” for “feeling,” and “crusior point,” which appears to mean “crucial point.” Phrases such as “comfortable sense” and “cozy” are not natural choices in these contexts. Build a more precise set of expressions for housing costs, financial security and social attitudes, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express connected ideas using longer sentences and clauses, for example when explaining how an employee might struggle to buy a home and continue paying for daily needs. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader must sometimes work to identify the intended meaning. Errors include “having a home to live in it,” “when your are,” and “the one who owning a home”; verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries also need attention. Punctuation is inconsistent, with long strings of clauses joined by commas. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “while.”

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