Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, a home has become a widely debated issue. While some people believe that owning a house is very important rather than renting one. This situation does bring positive outcome because owning a apartment brings peace of mind and secure future.

To begin with, one of the primary reasons why owning a house really matters is bacause it secures future and we do not have to think about moving out household stuffs again and again whenever we change our house. This is particularly important because job posting can be placed in any cities, thus if we have a fixed apartment, we can leave our family there. For example, if someone gets a good salary job outside the city, he can shift anytime. As, he does not have to think about family and sifting house again. Consequently, it can be beneficial to him, as he will not have to a rent house and can save money.

Furthermore, another significant consideration is renting house is not permanent. Though, we have to change house more and more according to our situation. For this reason, the children will not be able to cope up with different environments and people. Thus it will affect their studies and growth. A good illustration of this can be seen in the private sector. As, the transfer of the jobs are more frequent. As a result, it can hamper our work and life balance. Therefore, owning house can lead to financial freedom and assets growth.

In conclusion, although getting a home is not possible for all , I think that owning house by paying down-payment is also a huge achievement because it brings independence and self-satisfaction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that home ownership is positive, and you offer relevant reasons, including security, avoiding repeated moves, and supporting children’s stability. However, the response only partly develops the task. The reasons for why ownership matters are present, but some explanations are unclear or not fully connected: for example, the point about leaving one’s family in a fixed apartment when taking a job elsewhere needs clearer reasoning. The discussion of children’s adjustment and job transfers is also asserted rather than explained in detail. Your conclusion repeats the positive view but does not bring the main reasons together. Develop each reason with a more direct explanation and a specific, logically relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help show the intended stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The sequence from job opportunities to leaving family in an apartment, then saving money, is not clearly linked. Several transitions are also mechanical or incorrectly attached, as in “Though, we have to change house” and the repeated “As a result”/“Therefore” pattern. Some references, such as “it” in “it can hamper our work and life balance,” are unclear. Make each paragraph follow a clear reason–explanation–example sequence, and use fewer, more precise linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “peace of mind,” “secure future,” “financial freedom” and “self-satisfaction,” which helps communicate your position. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “job posting can be placed in any cities,” “sifting house,” “cope up with,” and “assets growth.” Spelling and form errors such as “bacause” and “a apartment” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise housing and employment vocabulary, and check common word partnerships. For instance, describe “relocating household belongings” rather than “moving out household stuffs,” and use “cope with” rather than “cope up with.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using clauses with “because,” “if,” “though” and “as a result.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure, but control is inconsistent, and some complex sentences are incomplete or awkwardly joined. For example, “While some people believe that owning a house is very important rather than renting one” is a dependent clause without a complete main clause. Other problems include “renting house is not permanent,” “the transfer of the jobs are more frequent,” and the sentence fragment “As, the transfer of the jobs are more frequent.” Article use, agreement and punctuation also need attention. Practise forming complete sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and clause boundaries before submission.

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