Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In some countries, owning a home is considered far more important than renting one, while some people contend that private ownership plays a pivotal role in both finance and character. This essay will discuss both sides, but I strongly disagree with this perspective.

For generations, owning a house is not merely considered as a shelter, but as a symbol of financial empowerment and adulthood. Nevertheless, it also saves money from being spent, where you know that it will never return. However, people use their properties as business (renting their houses, making them hotel and even more). Moreover, for generations an individual who own a house people view him as a respectful and character built person. For instance, a man who is guard in a company, no matter how much he is caring and kind hearted person, people will still see him as a poor guard. Thus, the company CEO will be respected more because he owns an institute.

Despite these traditional ideals, I believe that leasing someone's wealth often restricts from financial freedom rather then securing it. Although, some people work hard day and night for their family, but when they are pressurized by the owners to pay the rent. Due to this, situation and mental pressure, many people fell into different diseases( tension, heart-attack and even more).

In conclusion, owning a house can be a source of wealth and respect, but it can ruin the life of a man who is already (hand to mouth). If the government pay attention on this problem and introduce some initiatives then this issue can be resolved.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions by suggesting that home ownership can represent financial security and social status, then giving a negative view of the pressure associated with renting. However, the response only partially develops these points. The explanation that ownership is a “symbol of financial empowerment and adulthood” is relevant, but the example comparing a guard with a CEO does not clearly show why owning a home matters, since the CEO is said to own an institute. Your position is also difficult to follow: you say you “strongly disagree with this perspective,” but later argue that renting can restrict financial freedom, without clearly stating whether the importance placed on ownership is positive or negative. State your view directly and support it with focused, relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Nevertheless,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links are unclear or mechanical. In the first body paragraph, the discussion moves from saving money to using property as a business and then to social respect, without explaining how these points connect. The example about the guard and CEO further interrupts the focus. In the second body paragraph, “Although” and “but” are used together, while “Due to this, situation” does not clearly refer back to a specific cause. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of topic-related vocabulary, including “financial empowerment,” “private ownership,” “leasing” and “initiatives.” These choices show an effort to use less common language, and the main ideas are generally understandable. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “making them hotel,” “character built person” and “restricts from financial freedom.” “Hand to mouth” is also an informal expression and is awkwardly placed in the conclusion. Aim for precise, natural combinations rather than more elaborate wording: for example, describe a property as being “converted into a hotel,” and say that rent “limits tenants’ ability to save.” Checking collocations and choosing a consistent formal register would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “Although” and “who,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in verb forms and agreement: “For generations, owning a house is” would be more appropriately expressed as “has been,” and “an individual who own” needs subject–verb agreement. Some sentence structures are incomplete or incorrectly joined, as in “Although, some people work hard day and night for their family, but…”; use either “Although” or “but,” not both. Punctuation also makes parts difficult to follow, particularly “Due to this, situation and mental pressure.” Practise building accurate complex sentences and check agreement, tense consistency and clause boundaries. These corrections would make your meaning clearer.

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