Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In some countries, poeple think rent home own in instead own is very important. this is serval case, In my opinion, this is pesitive situation. On the one hand, there is main reason is protect, when you are survive in renting house, then your own can take anytime empty my home. else increase rent, However, when oun your home then you can not leve in the home, you can feel stronge and free. second reason ,our home is good investimate, home price every year rose, if any person buying home then it can sale ahead many prices, in pakistan country many people think in your home community give me respect. In my opinion this is postive because his people have been clam, when one family own your home, then children can studying in surival year at one school and parent often not stressed, people should in change ought his can painting new color and build new room its feel happy. oungt his negative effect new house buying very expensive and some young people are give loon in bank. In conclusion, althoughome your h

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that owning a home is positive and identify relevant reasons: protection from eviction or rent increases, investment value, community respect, and stability for children. These points address both why ownership matters and whether it is positive. However, the response only partially develops the task. Several ideas are difficult to interpret, such as “your own can take anytime empty my home,” and the investment point is asserted without clear explanation or support. You also briefly mention the expense of buying and bank loans, but do not explain how this affects your judgement. The response is 67 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to explain and support your ideas. Develop each reason with a clear example and a fuller conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response through “On the one hand,” “second reason,” “In my opinion,” and “In conclusion.” The reader can identify a general movement from reasons for ownership to your positive view. However, ideas are not arranged coherently throughout: the discussion shifts quickly from security to investment, respect, children’s schooling, home improvements, and then the cost of buying. Some links are unclear, and the conclusion is cut off at “althoughome your h,” so it does not bring the argument together. Use separate paragraphs for the reasons, your evaluation, and the conclusion. Connect each point explicitly to the previous one, and avoid introducing a new counterpoint without explaining its relationship to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “rent,” “own your home,” “invest,” “community,” “respect,” and “bank,” so the subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and many word choices, forms, and spellings make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “surival year,” “investimate,” “clam,” and “loon,” while phrases such as “home price every year rose” and “many prices” are not natural collocations. Repetition of “home” and “people” also limits precision. Build a small set of accurate phrases for housing, security, and financial benefits, and check spelling and word forms. For example, use “property prices rise” rather than “home price every year rose,” and “a source of financial security” to express the investment idea clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and consequences using clauses with “when,” “then,” and “because,” and there are a few simple statements whose general meaning can be understood. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or incorrectly joined, as in “there is main reason is protect” and “when one family own your home, then children can studying.” Verb forms and agreement are also frequently inaccurate, including “people have been clam” and “home price … rose.” Articles, pronouns, and punctuation are inconsistently controlled, which makes several sentences hard to interpret. Practise building complete subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. For example: “Owning a home can provide security because landlords cannot ask the family to leave.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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