Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

A certain nations individuals posit that owning house is beneficial than renting house beacuse it was spend so much cost on rent. While owning house is difficult but after that they purchasing it will be curicial for future. I believe that owning a house is better than spent more in rent because rent will be pay on every month. Hence they also creat stress sometimes.

On the on hand, own house is greter achiements in life because nowadays house are so much expensive. Nowadays house are so much needed for the family beacuse of safety consernces and day to day life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a relevant opinion that owning a home is preferable, and you mention two possible reasons: recurring rent costs and the value of a home for family safety. However, the response addresses the task only partially. The reasons are stated briefly rather than explained, and the second question—whether this is a positive or negative situation—is not clearly answered beyond your preference for ownership. The discussion also stops before developing supporting examples or considering why home ownership matters in some countries. The response is 149 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to address both questions fully. To improve, state your position directly, explain the cultural or financial reasons, and support each point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an opening paragraph and a second paragraph, and linking expressions such as “Hence” and “On the on hand” show an effort to connect ideas. However, there is no clear overall progression: the opening repeats the comparison between owning and renting, while the second paragraph introduces achievement, expense and safety without explaining how these points relate. The contrast marker “On the on hand” is also incomplete, as no corresponding “other hand” follows. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly “While owning house is difficult but after that…”. Use a clear paragraph plan—reasons, then your evaluation—and make each linking phrase accurately reflect the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited but includes some relevant terms, such as “rent,” “expensive,” “family” and “safety,” so the main topic is generally recognisable. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning: “beacuse,” “curicial,” “greter achiements” and “consernces” are examples. Several phrases are also unnatural, including “spend so much cost on rent” and “owning house is beneficial than renting house.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for this topic, such as “pay rent,” “buy a property” and “provide financial security.” A wider range of precise vocabulary would also help you explain why ownership is important rather than repeating basic ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer structures, including “While owning house is difficult but after that…” and a sentence beginning “because,” but the longer constructions are often faulty. Errors in articles and sentence structure appear in “owning house” and “Nowadays house are,” while “rent will be pay on every month” has an incorrect verb form and preposition. The opening sentence also has an unclear grammatical relationship between its clauses. These errors can make parts of the response difficult to interpret, although some basic sentence meanings remain clear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause; check articles, subject–verb agreement and verb forms when editing.

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