Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Owing a home is a positive or negative situation in different perspective of people of different countries we will discuss in detail.

Especially, In Asia People tries their best to have their own home instead of living on rent which can doubled the monthly expenses and that point of view is a positive situation to owing a home even on loan from bank or on instalments with the passage of time after completing all the instalments the possession of house will be given and the monthly expense of rent will be consider as profit.

Second Reason of owing home is a positive situation because of land lords. There are many cases about disputes among the land lords and the renters due to different minor issues which leads to death.

Third Reason of owing home is a positive situation in different countries to get loans, products or other official facilities can be easily given to those who holds their own home as compare to those who lives on rent. Bank will not do much inquiries regarding issuing loan after receiving the home documents as witness or guarantee.

Fourth possible reason of owing home is getting official documents of a country for example if a person want to get a nationality and want live legally in any country he can get by investing in that country or if he buys property in form of apartment or home he would be entitled to get Nationality which is a positive situation as well.

There are few drawbacks of renting home which are,

Giving fixed amount at the end of each month consider as expense.

Many facilities from different departments can be rejected due to renting.

Disputes among the landlord and renter.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: why home ownership is important and whether it is positive or negative. However, the development is uneven. While you provide several reasons for the importance of home ownership, such as financial stability and legal benefits, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The position is clear, but the structure is more of a list than a cohesive argument. To reach a higher band, ensure each paragraph explores a single idea in greater detail rather than providing a series of short, disconnected points. The conclusion is also missing, which is necessary to summarize your position effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. You use transition words like 'Second Reason' and 'Third Reason', which is a mechanical approach to cohesion. The flow between sentences is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument. Additionally, the final section is presented as a list of bullet points, which is inappropriate for an IELTS essay and negatively impacts the overall structure. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'positive situation' and 'owning a home'. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'installments', 'possession', and 'nationality', but the range is limited. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'doubled the monthly expenses' or 'official facilities'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms and precise collocations related to finance and housing to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'People tries', 'who holds'), incorrect article usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'as compare to those who lives'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would help improve your accuracy.

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