Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people in my opinion this is positive situation Because in his home they spend life freedomly and no tension of rent another veiw which people lives in rent house they tension for house rent which people own his home they change each and every things in his home they show in society they are rich and which people don not buy home they illustrate in society they are poor nowadays rental house rent is much expensive poor cannot afford house rent and they should they buy a cheap price house they can afford this and government shoul

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 111 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address why home ownership is important—mentioning freedom and social status—the arguments are underdeveloped and lack depth. You also touch upon the financial burden of renting, but the response is cut off abruptly at the end, leaving the conclusion incomplete. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure you fully address all parts of the prompt, including a clear introduction and a well-developed conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and arguments logically. Phrases like 'another veiw' are used to transition, but the overall structure is fragmented. The lack of punctuation, particularly between sentences, creates a 'run-on' effect that hinders readability. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs (introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion) and use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'rich', 'poor', and 'house'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'spend life freedomly' (should be 'live freely') and 'change each and every things' (should be 'make changes to their property'). The spelling is also inconsistent, for example, 'veiw' instead of 'view' and 'shoul' instead of 'should'. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary and focus on using words that are appropriate for an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people lives in rent house'), incorrect pronoun usage ('in his home'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and often grammatically incomplete or incorrectly punctuated. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of punctuation to separate distinct ideas.

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