Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I will explain this paragraph your home is better then rent or rentel home better.

Moslty asian countries rentels home taking.If i think your own home is better then the rent.

If you take home for rent first give security and next every month give you rent and also your home expance so i think middle class family connot offerd this.And also everymonth rentel home owner up the rent also to much disturb. And also security issue and not secure.

If rentel home owner is good behieve the take for rent if he cooprate with you then if its better.

Now i explain benefit if your home is own.

Then is better then rentels home.First of all your family is secure in your home.So if your money is also save and not to much used extra money.And also you save your money and in future you used money to other bussiness.

If your home is own i think is positive

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address why home ownership is important and whether it is positive, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth for an academic task. The response is repetitive and lacks a formal structure, such as a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The position is stated but not supported with sufficient evidence or logical progression. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure the essay meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical structure. There is no paragraphing, and the flow of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'And also' to start sentences. The transition between the reasons for home ownership and the opinion on whether it is positive is abrupt. To improve, you should use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas and organize your response into distinct paragraphs for each main point.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'home', 'rent', and 'money'. There is a lack of variety and precision, and the word choice is often inaccurate, such as 'rentels home taking' or 'home expance'. The spelling errors, such as 'connot offerd' and 'behieve', further limit the effectiveness of the communication. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms related to housing, finance, and social issues, and focus on correct word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order. For example, 'If i think your own home is better then the rent' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The essay relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, with no successful attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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