Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays owning the home is very important for people in some countries . I believe that this is the positive situation because it provide security benifits and finacial stability . i thing every people own his home and the life is more piecefull because he does not carrying about the future life .
Many people have many reasons in his life he was stay in renting house and paying more money in his salary and the other hand one person have a own home he does not paying extra money to another house holder because he have own home he did not pay money . in many countries individuals did not have home so he was staying at the place and paying rent to home owner . many people paying his home rent and stay forever . most of the people like the rented home because he did not stay at the same play in many time he was going in one city to another city . and the other hand people like his own property because he was staying on it . but i thing so individuals have choice to pay rent and than he was stay in home and the people have some money to he was build his home and stay in it people have different choice in many countries people also have home but he was staying the renting home because he was going to some works in one city to another .
In the conculotion I thing this is positive to pay home rent and stay in it . because individuals have an issue to going for work in one city to another city and people most of the like is this thing .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: why home ownership is important and whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The arguments regarding financial stability and the flexibility of renting are mentioned but lack depth or clear logical progression. The conclusion contradicts the earlier stance, as the writer initially argues that owning a home is positive, but the conclusion suggests that paying rent is positive. This inconsistency makes the overall position unclear. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported idea and maintain a consistent argument throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused (e.g., 'on the other hand' is used incorrectly to introduce simple additions rather than contrasts). Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly with the use of pronouns like 'he' and 'it,' which often lack a clear antecedent. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. More varied linking words and clearer paragraph transitions are needed to improve coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'home,' 'money,' and 'people.' There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'house holder' instead of 'landlord' and 'staying on it' instead of 'living in it.' Spelling errors, such as 'benifits,' 'finacial,' 'piecefull,' and 'conculotion,' are noticeable. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to housing and finance and ensure you are using words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay consists primarily of simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every people own,' 'he was stay'), tense consistency, and article usage. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'in many countries individuals did not have home so he was staying at the place and paying rent to home owner' contains multiple errors in structure and agreement. A focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement is essential before attempting more complex structures.
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