Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In some countries owing a house rather than renting one is most important for individual . I believe that both are positive or negative situation .
On the one hand , there are many positive affects in some countries single a house rather than renting one is very important for people . firstly , owing a home is very important in each person life . Because , individual not feel stress house is good way of the life . such as , not pay the rent people feel for free of mind . Secondly , in few countries owning a home rather than paying is very important for individual . many people not achieve our house . So , renting is good method for people . for example , small income achieving people easily paying the rent . Thirdly , there are various good affects to the people for paying the charges . people for uses good way to pay the rent .
On the other hand , there are various negative impact in some countries owing a house rather than charges is more important for individual . In additionally , the big impact people many people buy big house . So , two member stay in the home . for example , couple feel alone in the bigger house while , to increase the stress . However, in some countries renting impact on the people . there are various people not pay the charges a home because rent is very high in the countries . people not proper manage .
In conclusion , there are various positive situations in few countries owing a home rather than renting . people good manage in the house rather than renting a house .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing why home ownership is important and whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding 'stress' and 'free of mind' is underdeveloped, and the points about renting are somewhat contradictory. The position is not clearly maintained throughout the essay, as the introduction states 'both are positive or negative,' which is confusing. To improve, you should focus on clearly stating your position in the introduction and ensuring each paragraph contains a single, well-explained main idea supported by relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by unclear phrasing and awkward transitions. While cohesive devices like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'on the other hand' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the sentences that follow. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the phrase 'various good affects to the people' is vague and does not clearly link back to the previous point. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices to link ideas within sentences rather than just starting paragraphs with them, and ensure that each sentence follows logically from the one before it.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, often relying on basic words like 'good,' 'important,' and 'people.' There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'owing a house' (should be 'owning'), 'positive affects' (should be 'effects'), and 'achieve our house' (should be 'afford a house'). These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to grasp the intended meaning. To improve, you should practice using more precise vocabulary related to housing and finance, and pay closer attention to word forms and common collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'individual not feel stress,' 'people not proper manage'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces placed incorrectly before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors causes some difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and a correctly conjugated verb.
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