Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 5.5)
IT IS WIDELY BELIEVE IN SOME R THAT OWNING A HOME IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR INDIVIDULS RATHER THAN RENTING ONE. MEANWHILE, I WOULD AGREE WITH ABOVE PHENOMENON AND REASONS TO SUPPORT THIS POSITIVE SITUATION WILL BE EXPLAINED IN ENSUING PARAGRAPHS, ALONG WITH EXAMPLES.
DISCUSSING THE MAJOR MERIT IS THAT OWNING HOME IS LONG-TERM ENOURMOUSLY SECURE FINANCIAL INVESTMENT. BECAUSE PROPERTY TIME MAY SEVERITY INCREASE OVER TIME. TO FUSTIFY IT FURTHER, FINANCIALLY STABLE FAMILY BUYS HOME IN A DEVELOPING CITY MAY SELL IT AFTER SOME TIME FOR MUCH HIGHER PRICE. MOREOVER, PROPERTY PRICE MAY INCREASE OVER TIME HOME OWNER CAN BUILD WEALTH, THEREFOR IN SOME COUNTRIES OWNING A HOME IS CONSIDERED A SYMBOL OF THRIVNESS. HOMEOWERS DO NOT HAVE TO WORRIED ABOUT THE INCREASING RENTS AND LANDLORDS ASKING THEM TO LEAVE, THUS PEOPLE FEEL PSYCHOLOGICALLY ALLEVIATE.
UNDOUBTEDLY, OWNER CAN RENOVATE AND DECORATE THEIR PROPERTIY ACCORDING TO THEIR INTERPERSONAL MINDSET AND CREATIVITY. TO BE MORE PRECISE, OWNING HOME CAN PROVID FAMILIES TO STABLE PLACE TO LIVE. OWING HOME IS ONE OF THE MOST PROMINENT ASSET FOR CHILDREN BECASUE INFLATION AND HIGH DEMAD IN FUTURE. FOR INSTANCE, HOMEOWNER CAN BUILD EXTRA ROOM AND PARKING AREA OR CAN RENOVATE KITCHEN AS PER THEIR NEEDS.
TO SUM UP, IN THIS COMPETITIVENESS ERA, BUYING HOME OFFERS SAVERAL IMPORTANT BENEFITS, SUCH AS FINANCIAL STABILITY, SECURITY AND VALUABLE INVESTMENT. HENCE, OWING HOME IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR PUBLIC IN SOME COUTRIES.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for home ownership and expressing a clear positive stance. However, the essay is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of the arguments. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat repetitive and lack detailed development. For instance, the point about 'financial security' is mentioned multiple times without sufficient elaboration or concrete examples. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific evidence or logical consequences to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'meanwhile', 'moreover', and 'to sum up'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as the opening sentence structure. The transition between ideas within paragraphs could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disconnected from the main argument. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help the flow of your writing and improve your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors that hinder the professional tone of the essay. Examples include 'enourmously' (enormously), 'fustify' (justify), 'thrivness' (thriving/prosperity), and 'severity' (value/price). While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'financial investment' and 'inflation', the frequent spelling mistakes and awkward collocations (e.g., 'interpersonal mindset') suggest a limited range of precise vocabulary. Focusing on learning word families and checking spelling will significantly enhance your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'property price may increase... home owner can build'), missing articles (e.g., 'owning home'), and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'do not have to worried'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, although they do not completely impede communication. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on sentence construction, specifically ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound and that your punctuation is accurate.
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