Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is often debated whether owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people plays a crucial role in modern society. while some people believe that renting one is very important for people , others argue that owning a home rather. I think this is a negative situation because all people not affordable price , society issues .
Commencing with the reason of owning a home rather, the first addication . To elaborate it , people choose favourite home , quilitys and choose favourite things and decoretion . In the same way , people feel confidentaly in own society and owner our home . They have freedom for own choice . There have not been pat the rent and feel uncomftable , not speak confidently own society .
I believe in negative situation , negative situation because all people not affordable price for new home . New home expencive price . On the others hand society issues . All society not comftable for all society members . Money issues for example , money is very powerfull than person . So that family need important items but man not completle pu
In conclusion , I think this is a negative situation because all people not affordable price , society issues . while some people believe that renting one is very important for people , others argue that owning a home rather.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both parts of the prompt—explaining why home ownership is important and expressing an opinion on whether it is positive or negative—the arguments are underdeveloped and often unclear. For instance, your explanation of why people value home ownership is fragmented, and your reasoning for why it is a 'negative situation' is difficult to follow due to limited vocabulary and incomplete sentences. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure your position is clearly articulated throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While you use basic paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are often abrupt or missing. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and sometimes misused, such as the repetitive use of 'negative situation' and 'society issues' without clear links to the preceding or following sentences. The conclusion is particularly weak, as it merely repeats the introduction rather than summarizing the main points. To improve, focus on using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more effectively and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which hinders your ability to express complex ideas. Many words are used incorrectly or are misspelled, such as 'addication' (likely meaning 'addition' or 'reason'), 'quilitys' (qualities), 'decoretion' (decoration), and 'expencive' (expensive). There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and you rely heavily on basic terms. To improve, try to learn synonyms for common words and focus on the correct spelling and usage of topic-specific vocabulary related to housing and economics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are many sentence fragments, such as 'all people not affordable price , society issues', which lack a main verb. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there are issues with word order and article usage. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic punctuation and verb tense consistency is also essential.
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