Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In several countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.
If people have their own home,they cannot pay monthly leaving cost. They live comfortable life without any problem. They live with their family with great facilites. They cannot took the the burden of rent. Thwy perform their actrivites without any hisitation. so if they had their own home they live with peace. It is a good way of spenting meaningful life.
It helps in improving their economic condition. They lent them for rent and earn money from them. They sold them in any serious need and fulfil there need. They pay their dues by the help of the rent of house. In this way they pay their dues and spent a meaningful life. They perform activites in their
house according to their own choice. It is good way of enjoy for them. A person can be enter in their home at any time without any hardle. So a person can spent reasonable if he had his own home.
A person can spent a lot ao money for develop his own home. He get heavy
loans from banks and lent money from relatives and other peoples. It becomes a burdwen for them. It built his home with great difficulties. develop home is not a easy task it requires many effort and money. It creates many problems for a man.
In my opinion who man able to built his home he built his home and a man who is not able to buit jhis home he cannot built it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt by discussing why homeownership is important and whether it is a positive or negative situation. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For example, the writer mentions that homeowners can 'lent them for rent and earn money', but this idea is poorly developed and somewhat contradictory to living in the home. The position is discernible but lacks clear, well-extended arguments. The discussion tends to generalise without providing substantial elaboration. Consequently, the response aligns best with Band 5, as the ideas remain under-developed and the task is only partially satisfied with simplistic reasoning throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text demonstrates a basic level of organisation with attempts at paragraphing, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive. For instance, the transition between ideas relies heavily on simple pronouns and repetitive sentence openings like 'They' and 'A person can'. Paragraphing is erratic, with several very short, disconnected paragraphs that fail to structure the argument effectively. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the ambiguous pronoun usage in 'They lent them for rent'. Overall, the coherence and cohesion of the response fall into the Band 4 to Band 5 range, fitting best at Band 4 due to the lack of clear logical sequencing and flawed mechanical cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'home', 'money', 'problem', and 'life'. There are noticeable word-choice errors and incorrect collocations, such as 'leaving cost' instead of living costs, 'took the the burden' instead of bear the burden, and 'spenting meaningful life' instead of spending a meaningful life. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic meaning, but frequent lexical errors and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'facilites', 'hisitation', 'actrivites', 'hardle', 'burdwen', 'buit') cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at more complex structures are consistently faulty, such as 'In my opinion who man able to built his home he built his home and a man who is not able to buit jhis home he cannot built it.' Errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and word form are frequent throughout the text (e.g., 'if they had their own home they live', 'He get heavy loans', 'develop home is not a easy task'). These frequent grammatical errors distort meaning and make the text difficult to follow at times, fully supporting a Band 4 rating.
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