Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Every country has its own particular customs and values, with which their government operates independently. For many foreign countries like Australia for instance, people highly prefer owning their own home rather than buying and renting a house they have to pay for every month. The reason behind this mindset holds a wide range of individualism, where individuals can make changes to their own home according to their particular requirements and desires, without a any government or public involvement. The rented houses are strictly prohibited to be redesigned or reconstructed without an appropriate lawful approach. The government penaltises those who dares to change the household features including its infrastructure inside or out. Thus, making it quite hard for people to make typical adjustments while holding back their needs for changes. Although the people can ask for permission to do, but a self-decisive act regarding the house is a concerning factor and for these particular circumstances, most people strive to have their own homeplace. Another most important reason is the sense of financial security and property. With own home, a person feels financial secure and does not depend on others decisions to living standards. Here comes the feeling of security that the individual no longer need to be afraid of getting a notice to leave the house by landlords. Therefore, the financial security and the feeling of having a property is a long-term investment everyone must try to invest in.

The privacy to modify the house according to one's need is also exploited when the owner of the house denies to its permission. This establishes a concept of owning one's own home with self-centred decisions and also it becomes an ultimate asset to an indivudual for a long-term advantage.

I personally believe this is an extremely positive approach which gives the idea of self-sufficiency and confidence to a person who does not need to ask or adjust into a house where renovation can not be done without permission from the legislation or the owner of the house.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt by explaining why homeownership is valued (individualisation and financial security) and clearly stating a position that this is a positive situation. Ideas are extended and supported, such as mentioning the freedom to make changes and the elimination of landlord notices. However, there is a slight over-generalisation regarding government penalties on rented properties, and some arguments become slightly repetitive towards the end of the body paragraphs. Overall, the task is fully addressed with a clear stance maintained throughout, placing it firmly in the Band 7 range according to the descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay demonstrates clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Each paragraph has a discernible focus, moving from an introduction to reasons for homeownership, and finally to the writer's personal opinion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'The reason behind this mindset', 'Although', and 'Another most important reason'. However, paragraphing is somewhat weak; the first main body paragraph is excessively long and contains multiple distinct ideas that should have been separated, while the final main point spills over awkwardly. Referencing is occasionally slightly unclear, leading to a Band 6.5 or solid Band 6 performance in paragraphing structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'individualism', 'infrastructure', 'financial security', and 'self-sufficiency'. However, there are noticeable word-choice and collocation inaccuracies, such as 'penaltises those who dares' (penalises those who dare), 'self-decisive act', 'feels financial secure' (financially secure), and 'denies to its permission' (denies permission). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the lexical score from reaching Band 7, making Band 6 a more accurate reflection of the student's current proficiency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and subordinate clauses like 'Although the people can ask for permission to do, but a self-decisive act...'. However, this sentence exhibits a common error of combining 'Although' and 'but' in the same clause. There are several other grammatical slips and awkward phrasings, such as 'without a any government' and 'indivudual' (spelling). The majority of sentences contain minor structural or agreement errors, which places this response comfortably in the Band 6 category where errors are present but rarely impede overall communication.

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