Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Several countries individuals or citizens believe that owning a house is better insteading a renting house because in renting house we pay the rent in the starting on the month and we do not have any priva. In this eassy we discuss both positive and negative situation

Firstly, it is widely believed that owner house is vital to leading his life in these countries. In Asian people think if we have own big house then everyone is give him respect and we become a superior. Moverover, we rise the level in our society. On the other hand, some individuals want a privacy to lead his life in it and noone disturb. For example, are you invinting your friends or relative for a party also stay in it. You do not permission anyone and he easily enjoy their own party. You do not give a money in the starting in the month

Secondly, the renting house quites difficult to hand in it. Basically, you do not have permanent house. In addition, owner have a right to dismiss whenever he wants, after serving notices. If you younger children draw a drawing then the owner is shouting and we must pay the fine for damaging his property. For instance, in renting house you do not just pay a rent furthermore you obey his requirement such as you never late at home, noone is coming to meet you after 10:00 am. The main door is locked at night and the significant problem is the owner check your rented home without your concern.

In these issues occur we do not have any privacy that is why many countries people think the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several reasons why home ownership may matter, including social respect, privacy, and avoiding a landlord’s rules, and you give examples such as restrictions on visitors and inspections. However, the response does not clearly answer both parts of the question. The reasons are mixed with advantages of renting, and the final sentence is unfinished, so your overall judgement of whether this situation is positive or negative is not stated. Some points, such as gaining respect from owning a large house, are asserted rather than explained. To strengthen the response, explain the reasons people value ownership, then state and support a clear positive or negative view throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs and use signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “For instance.” These help the reader recognise that you are introducing different points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because ideas shift within paragraphs: the first body paragraph moves from social status to privacy and parties, while the second combines housing insecurity, damage rules, visitor restrictions, and inspections. Some links are unclear, and the conclusion begins with “In these issues occur” but does not complete the thought. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example directly to that idea, and finish with a complete conclusion that answers the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “privacy,” “permanent house,” “serving notices,” and “damaging his property,” which shows an attempt to discuss housing and tenancy. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or awkward expressions make meaning harder to follow, such as “owner house,” “hand in it,” and “we rise the level in our society.” Spelling errors such as “eassy” and “invinting” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn natural collocations for this topic and check word forms and spelling. For example, use “owning a home,” “deal with renting,” and “improve our social standing” to express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “If you younger children draw a drawing then the owner is shouting,” and you use basic present-tense statements to explain your points. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction frequently make the message difficult to understand. Examples include “owner have a right,” “everyone is give him respect,” and “you do not permission anyone.” The final sentence is also incomplete. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “if,” and “when.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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