Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes, I think its true in some countries people wants his own homes rather than renting, And i think this is positive if every one his home.

Firstly, we see why people wants his home. I think because if people have his house then thy don't have to much pressure about rent every month and they easily mannage his life by monthly sallery. If some one on rent they always wants to mannage his sallery and controll his where he spend this is very effect on mind and this is pressure on human because they always focuse on where he spend his sallery.

Secondly, If any one have his house then they deacorate how they want and build like he wants and his family, When they build his house they mannage how they build and where he need room where he need T.V lone and where he need kitchean, etc.

And on the other hand if we have reanted house then we not mannage according to our wish and we cannot build anything and i think this is the most biggiest problem.

And here we see why some lives on rent, I think if we live outside from our city then we focuse on renting property and this is good because if we stay 2 months or three months its easy to stay on reant house thats batter option.

And the last thing is some poor familes shift from his own city to any other big city for more opportinity because in big cities they find easily job and they survive with his family,

And when his struggle face end they also buy his own house.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that owning a home reduces the pressure of monthly rent and allows people to arrange the property to suit their family, and you state that this is positive. These are relevant reasons, and the example of people renting temporarily when they move away from their city adds some balance. However, the position is not consistently explained: the opening says ownership is positive “if every one his home,” while the later discussion also presents renting as a good option without clarifying how this relates to your overall judgement. Several points, especially the claim about moving to a big city for work, are introduced but not fully connected to the question. Develop the reasons with clearer explanation and examples, and make your overall view explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence, using “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “on the other hand” to introduce different points. This helps the reader identify the main topics: financial pressure, personalising a home, and temporary or work-related renting. However, progression is uneven because the final two points about renting and moving for opportunities are not clearly linked to the main argument. Some sentences repeat the same idea about managing a salary, and references such as “they” and “his” make it difficult to tell who is being discussed. Paragraphing would also help separate the reasons for home ownership from the situations in which renting is useful. Organise each paragraph around one clear point and use linking phrases to show how it supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “rent,” “house,” “family,” “job,” and “pressure,” so the main subject is generally understandable. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as “monthly salary” and “opportunity.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “manage” and “house.” Frequent spelling errors, including “mannage,” “sallery,” “deacorate,” and “opportinity,” make the writing less clear and reduce accuracy. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “the most biggest problem” and “stay on rent.” Build a wider set of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe housing costs as “monthly rent” and a home as “a property.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “if people have his house then they don't have to much pressure about rent every month.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the sentence patterns are often faulty, and errors frequently make the reader work to understand the meaning. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent (“people wants”), pronouns do not agree with their subjects (“people…his”), and articles and verb forms are often missing or incorrect (“if any one have his house”). Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also unreliable, as in the opening, where several clauses are joined with a comma. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses using “because,” “if,” and “when,” checking agreement and punctuation in each sentence.

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