Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is a common situation in some countries when owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. It depends upon diffierent factors, in this essay I'll explain them and express my opinion.

First of all, there are many countries where having a large family and owning a home for it is the part of cultural code of the country. Although, a person can rent the accomadation it is more pleasunt to have your own. It shows your financial and family sustainability. Secondly, it derives us back to mentality. When you are owning something it frequently gives you a base which will support you in your next goals. For an instance, a person has a house (a base) and now can think about the next step (a car, for example).

If it doesn't connected with the mentality, it is connected with the other habits. For example, when a person rents the accomadation it requires communication skills. Discussing the conditions with the owner can be chellanging if owner is a strickt or wierd person.

In my opinion, it is really important to have your own home, but I truly believe that it is a personal choice for everyone and it shouldn't be dictated by the culture of your country if it causes a discomfort for a person. That means that I consider it as a positive situation until it brakes someone's boundaries. There are some advantages and disadvantages in both ways of living. The most important thing here is doesn't paste someone under the pressure becuse of the prejudice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you suggest cultural expectations, family needs, financial stability and the practical difficulty of negotiating with a landlord as reasons for home ownership, then give a qualified positive view. However, the response is one word below the 250-word minimum; the 12 words copied from the task prompt are not included in the count. More importantly, several reasons are asserted rather than explained. For example, the link between owning a home and being able to buy a car is not clearly established, and the point about rental communication could be developed with a specific consequence. Your position—that ownership is positive only when it is a personal choice—is understandable, but needs fuller support and a clearer conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from reasons for ownership to your opinion, and paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “Secondly,” and “For example” make some relationships clear. However, progression is uneven: the paragraph beginning “If it doesn't connected with the mentality” shifts to renting without clearly showing how this is another reason ownership is valued. Some links are mechanical, and “Although” is awkwardly separated from the clause that follows. The final paragraph combines your position, a qualification, and a general statement about advantages and disadvantages, so the conclusion feels crowded. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “cultural code,” “financial sustainability,” “personal choice,” and “boundaries,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “accomadation,” “pleasunt,” “chellanging,” “strickt,” “wierd,” and “prejudice.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “derives us back to mentality,” “paste someone under the pressure,” and “brakes someone's boundaries.” These choices can make the reader pause to infer your meaning. Aim for accurate, natural collocations—for example, “cultural expectations,” “financial security,” and “put someone under pressure”—and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including a concession with “Although” and conditional phrasing such as “if it causes a discomfort.” However, errors occur frequently, and some complex constructions are faulty. Examples include “If it doesn't connected” (the verb form is incorrect), “When you are owning something” (the progressive form is unsuitable here), and “the most important thing here is doesn't paste” (the clause structure is incomplete). There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “if owner is a…” and “Although, a person…”. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate clauses first, then add subordinate clauses and check verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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