Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In may countries owning a persnal home rather than renting is very crusical for people. I partically positve and negitive beacuse owning home is important to saves the taxes, highly renting, while renting also play a vital role in saving a lot of many insted of owning home. discussing both of views.

On the one Hand, Owning home play important roles giving a silent environment, lot of space for you tools, and provide a peaceful and wide area. for example some one have a own home they will divide the room for mainly goods and books, like one room for academic, works one room for taking the personal tools. Futhermore, Renting one is very important for people, beacuse renting home saving you costs, for example some people leaves in out of cuntry they can not buy there own home beacuse own home is highly expansive accounding to the renting.

On the other hand owning home rather than renting some drawback, however, owning home have a lot of devote such as electric bill, water bill, and lots of bill paying these cach a lot of money. renting home also verly important rather than you leaves out of the cuntry beacuse they save a lots of cots, but its can not give you a feeling like a worth area beacuse of sufficent area for taking a book and other useful tools

In conclusion, owning home some positive and negitive benifit such is lost of cots and also play important role in werth area while the renitng homes paly important rols saving a lot of expendtions, also some drewback lack of area and unsitible envirnment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both parts of the question: you suggest that owning a home offers space and a peaceful environment, and you discuss renting as a way to reduce costs, particularly for people living abroad. However, the reasons why home ownership is important in some countries are not clearly explained, and the claim about saving taxes is not developed. Your view is also difficult to identify: “I partically positve and negitive” signals a mixed opinion, but the conclusion mainly lists advantages and disadvantages rather than stating whether the situation is positive or negative overall. Examples, such as dividing rooms for books and personal items, are relevant but need clearer explanation. Develop a consistent position and explain the reasons and consequences more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the contrast between “On the one Hand” and “On the other hand” gives the reader a basic structure. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from the benefits of ownership to the benefits of renting without a clear link, while the second combines ownership costs with renting’s advantages and disadvantages. Some linking phrases, including “Futhermore” and “however,” do not clearly show how the ideas relate. The conclusion repeats points rather than bringing the argument together. Give each paragraph one main purpose, order supporting details logically, and use clear references so readers can follow which type of housing each point concerns.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “peaceful,” “environment,” “electric bill,” and “personal tools,” and you use some contrast language to discuss ownership and renting. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning difficult to follow, such as “highly renting,” “worth area,” and “lost of cots.” Spelling errors are frequent, including “persnal,” “crusical,” and “expendtions,” and some word combinations are unnatural, such as “owning home play important roles.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to infer your meaning. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; prefer clear expressions such as “housing costs” and “a sense of security.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with examples and reasons, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors can make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “owning home play important roles giving” lacks accurate article use and verb agreement, while “some people leaves” and “they save a lots” show problems with subject–verb agreement and plural forms. Several sentences are fragments or run together, including the opening’s “discussing both of views.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles and punctuation. Using a few accurate complex forms with “because” or “although” would help express your comparisons more clearly.

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